|Reviews for Erased|
| Writing-Rabbit's-Wreakage chapter 1 . 2/25/2009
ok look this is exacltly like new moon im sorry if this isent constructive critizezum but you have to be more creative like...idk insted of making her jump have a helicopter explode in the distanse and convinetly there is a soft thing in the water and she dosent die and make it wierd like a dragon swoops out of no where because this is identical to twilight
| Loulabelle chapter 2 . 12/6/2008
Ah! I missed my alert for this chapter :O STOP BELLA! DON'T EAT THE NICE (in Mike's case, slightly annoying) PEOPLE! Ah! UPDATE ASAP! and tell me that she suddenly develops a concience and doesn't eat anyone or something like that :O
| xYiNxYanGxYoukaIx chapter 3 . 12/5/2008
please update soon
| xYiNxYanGxYoukaIx chapter 2 . 12/5/2008
Bella! You idiot! Go out there and get a damm grizzly bear!
| xYiNxYanGxYoukaIx chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
JUMP BELLA, JUMP! SO ALICE CAN COME AND SAVE THE DAY AND REUNITE YOU WITH EDWARD! OR EVEN BETTER, EDWARD COMES! OOH! OR EMMETT, YEAH EMMETT! um...yeah...sry loopy moment, good chapter!
| Loulabelle chapter 1 . 10/21/2008
It's a bit jumpy, but I can see that it's only because you wanted to move fast to get to the start of the real story.
I'm intrigued as to what will happen and i will read and review when you post the next chapter. I didn't notice any bad spelling or anything (just a few backwards or misplaced speech marks) UPDATE ASAP!