Reviews for Faust The Bat
Master Metallix chapter 13 . 7/10/2009
Nice job. Faust lucked out a little in the damage control, but Rouge got out worse for the wear (and even more after another joke burst her bubble... or threatened to). I hope the younger girls don't find too much trouble. Kep up the good work, and see you next chapter.
I dont want to grow up chapter 11 . 6/9/2009
At last, I come back to give the great review this story deserves!

Now, where to start... there's so much to compliment, it's hard. Well, let's start with your real descriptions. They are so normal, they're funny! "DEFINATLYNOTPORN" caused be to keel over in laughter... mainly because I do that to my folks to hide my christmas presents from them. It was believable, and that made it great to read. The flaming toaster shenanigans made for a real laugh.

Decribing Faust's like of certain foods also makes him more real to the reader. Shadow is friendly yet still menacing... of course, "slrigdekantoh" sort of reminded me how old he's supposed to be, but I love it.

The wanting Sonic dead plot is still brilliant, and moving along nicely. It's all so thought out, every detail. Very nice, very gripping.
ImTtlyTheHero chapter 12 . 6/2/2009
whoa... this story is so professionally written... i love it! 3
Master Metallix chapter 12 . 6/1/2009
These "games at midnight" don't seem particularly fun for the players, though I certainly find them fun to read. Cream is portrayed more correctly here than in previous chapters, which is good, but if she lied to Faust, then shouldn't he have detected the lie? If you want, you can make Cheese and other Chao talk slightly, such as by saying, "Chao, chao!" and variations thereof. And Rouge is gonna be in trouble, though she probably stiffed Eggman with a certain other folder of information than Faust's blueprints (albeit the other data is arguably equally or more dangerous to reveal). Keep up the good work, and see you next chapter.
Brice Smudar chapter 12 . 5/30/2009
It sure was rather convenient for Faust to land RIGHT NEXT to Eggman and Rouge, who I would imagine would want their meeting to be secret XD

Unless Rouge WANTED to be overheard! O.O

XP I dunno.

Great chapter, update soon, pass your exams, blah blah blah. X3
GIGA-XISBASS chapter 1 . 5/14/2009
NICE!
Master Metallix chapter 11 . 5/13/2009
I missed Chapter 10 when it came out, unless both Chapters 10 and 11 were released one after the other (not likely). Therefore, I'll review once for both.

Chapter 10:

"'He thinks I’m full of silicon.'

'Don’t we all…'"

Another Rouge's chest joke... not quite as funny as the first one, but still good. The quote at the end (from a historic person?) was interesting.

Chapter 11:

Don't file for bankruptcy with this story, okay?

Cream remains out of character by "grinning devilishly" at the events at the spa and by waiting for Tails in his bed, and even more so compared to the correct portrayal of politeness while eating breakfast. Tails' computer also has a mistake - he should be smart enough to spell "Definitely" CORRECTLY (not "definately") when using it as a folder name (and you should check your spelling anyway, just in case). Story-wise, I'm sure that the government will use the files Rouge copied from that folder to make Tails' life harder.

Overall:

Not bad, but you should try to keep the cast (specifically Cream) in character according to their usual portrayals in the games, comics, or other official appearances. Other than that, keep up the good work, and see you next chapter.
I dont want to grow up chapter 10 . 4/17/2009
Good to see that you haven't given up yet.

Still got it, I see. Quite entertaining, and it kept with the main plot still while making elements from the game seem real, like Amy's overprotection. I liked the bit with Rouge and Omega and how she asked for the blueprints. Quite believable, though surprising. And I liked that Eggman was, apparantly, still pround of Omega.

And again, brilliant plot device with the military and their embaresment over the Sonic Team. It just keeps making me wonder what's going on here.

Piko Piko Man... I keep forgetting that humans have Heroic tendncies when I think of Sonic. But I guess it doesn't work so well for them.
Brice Smudar chapter 10 . 4/17/2009
Ugh. I'm so tired. So forgive me if this review is kinda lame. -_-

Okay. I really like this chapter, and the story is getting a LOT better. And it was really good to begin with, so that was kinda redundant to say :P

Amy beating the crap out of the Piko-Piko man was WIN. Rouge's weakness for jewels was monstrously IN CHARACTER (and so was everyone else).

Really good job. Seriously. Everthing was great. The only possible thing I minded was Shadow being the one who made the announcment at the end. If it was Rouge or Omega, I wouldn't care. But that's mostly because I don't really see Shadow saying anything above his normal quiet voice. But that's just me being horrendiously picky about details.
Master Metallix chapter 9 . 3/7/2009
Nice job with this chapter. Maybe Cream, even if she's a little older than in the canon, is a little OOC with her actions around Tails. About the rating, I think your story can still remain T-Rated, as long as you don't get TOO explicit with detail or go 'too far' with their relationship. One thing, though: where does the "horny boys get nosebleeds" idea come from? Other than that, you did great, with the fight scenes and the inter-character communication, too. Keep up the good work, and see you next chapter.
I dont want to grow up chapter 8 . 1/20/2009
Aww, man, that stinks. I was really looking forward to more soon. The best of luck with your parents. Mine wouldn't let me write until they actually saw my work. Hopefully, you'll be back soon.

Best wishes.
Master Metallix chapter 7 . 1/9/2009
Now for a review better suited to the actual story... Since I haven't left other reviews yet, I'll review the story as a whole (with the obvious exception of Chapter 8) with one review, instead of spamming you with individual reviews for each chapter.

This is a very nice story. OCs are usually a turn-off for many people (myself included), but you actually put effort into creating Faust the Bat, so instead of being just another Gary-Stu that wastes readers' time, Faust actually has personality and life and is good for more than just cheap filler. The joke against Rouge in Chapter 5 made me laugh hard enough to cry - Rouge probably has more silicon than Metal Overlord! However, just now, in Chapter 7, the Piko-Piko Warrior is somewhat of a stereotype (or multiple stereotypes) - the fat old pervert, the poorly uniformed "superhero," and the hero-just-for-the-ladies'-attention. Faust was right in every possible way to punch him out. Overall, great job. Keep up the good work, and see you on Chapter 9.
Master Metallix chapter 8 . 1/9/2009
It's your parents who have to apologize, not you. You didn't do anything wrong. It's not their place, or anyone else's, to decide for you what you should or should not be doing. You are a free human being (at least I hope you're human) with the right to make your own decisions in life. If you want to spend time on the computer, you have every right to, and you shouldn't let anyone, not even (and in some cases especially not) your parents, walk all over you. Stand up for yourself and tell them that this is what you want to do, and if they don't like it, (insert expletive message here). I support equal rights for EVERYONE. You can't deny the opportunities of life to people even if they have a dark skin color, are female, believe (or don't believe) in a god or gods by whatever name known or believe in (a) different one(s) than another person, have a physically restrictive condition or sickness, or for any reason simply do not suit one person's standard of perfection, so why should children or teenagers get tossed around? You have the right to finish this story whenever you want to whether anyone else likes it or not.

Voltaire: "I may disagree with what you say, but I will defend to the death your right to say it."
Brice Smudar chapter 8 . 1/9/2009
Wow. Too bad, I really enjoyed the Faust series. But I'll enjoy it all the more once you're allowed to write it again.
I dont want to grow up chapter 7 . 1/5/2009
My brain just lost some brain cells, but grew some more when I realized just how genious this is. 'Piko Piko Man!'? Holy crap! That has to be the most brilliant subplot idea I have ever heard!

"Kind of like the normal world, but with more purple." I don't know why, but I laughed myself silly with that one. If I could sum uo you're writing style, it would be those words, with purple representing actuallity. I've never read a more compelling, well thought out, piece of fiction that was closer to reality and still keeps with the main worlds general points. The bit with Knuckles was mind grabbing, especially the bit with the hat. I love that hat. If only it hadn't caught on fire. I'm sorry it's not more popular just because it has an OC in it. That really isn't fair. I'd like to make this into a radio drama if I find the time, and a believable Faust voice. Ah well. Can't wait for more.
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