Reviews for Ranma and the Evil Within
deathgeonous chapter 4 . 4/24/2010
Hmm, this story is very interesting, and I do hope that you continue it some day. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Wordlurker chapter 4 . 10/13/2009
Pretty good stuff, this. Keep up the good work!
Unununium chapter 4 . 7/4/2009
I loved reading this, so thankyou for writing! The story is very different to the same rehashed plots you read on ffn these days, and was very well written. Thankyou again :)
Kinhoshi89 chapter 4 . 10/26/2008
Interesting.
DWM chapter 4 . 10/25/2008
Interesting story, keep writing.
Lawra chapter 4 . 10/25/2008
You should credit the story "Ranma, the naive Succubus" since the first two chapters take heavily from that story which can be found on the Anime Adventure website. Unless your NFR or one of the other authors in case you should probably indicate so.

Everything moves too fast and feels more like an outline waiting to be fleshed out rather than a story. Even the parts you lifted from another story.

Chapter 3

Ryoga only became able to soak up damage after the breaking point training and Ranma wouldn't tell him to prepare to die. Since he would have also remembered Ryoga at that point. Unless there was some difference in their backgrounds.

There also doesn't seem to be an obvious different between Ranma and Hideko, let alone one big enough for Akane to notice it in such a short time. Including some portions that show this off more would go a long way.

The Musk dynasty existed in secret, Cologne even states that she thought it had been destroyed ages ago, so it's kind of a stretch that the Amazons would actively know about internal secrets of their dynasty.

I like the premise of your fic but you need to slow down.