|Reviews for Dangerous Thoughts|
| Jp Marshall Law chapter 2 . 12/31/2012
| KP's Man chapter 2 . 4/11/2009
I just found this story,and you are off to a great
update soon,you have peaked my curiosity
| screaming phoenix chapter 2 . 11/15/2008
I hope you continue this it has a lot of promise.
I wonder if the fact the woman looked like Shego had anything to do with her disappearance.
The Kim and Ron scene was touching and fun to read. You captured the spirit of the relationship well,they just go so well together.
| screaming phoenix chapter 1 . 11/15/2008
Its a good start you have my attention.
| Ultimate Naco Topping chapter 2 . 11/15/2008
The only error you could make is to not continue writing. What I mean by that is, there are a few minor things I could bring up, but you've got a good foundation to build on. Emotionally, you are very strong in what you are communicating as a writer. There are some very mild structure problems in some sentences as well as a bit of grammar slip ups here and there, but like I said, the only true error would be for you to not continue. With time, those things smooth themselves out.
I like what you've got going so far. Keep writing.
Hope that helps!
(PM me if you want me to give you are more in depth critique and advice)
| Muzzlehatch chapter 1 . 10/26/2008
OK, you've caught my attention...