Reviews for Less Luck
Doom Marine 54 chapter 1 . 5/9/2009
You know its funny, in your attempt to bash Naruto in this story you actually glorify him. If Naruto had lost to Gaara, Konoha would have been destroyed. So your subtly saying that Naruto saved Konoha in canon by defeating Gaara. Meaning he is actually a bigger hero than we thought. I applaud you good sir! For this is perhaps one of the most clever fics showing Naruto in a positive light.
Jacki-maliska chapter 1 . 11/12/2008
it's an interesting premiss,

and with a little more thought behind it could have been an exceptional story

the beginning was well thought out and executed well. however it could have had more description to make it more believable. the middle and ending could have used a lot less one sentence thoughts and a little more substance to make sense of what is happening...

But it was a great idea, and a good story for a young writer

(btw don't judge my criticism on my writing I can't write I know but I'm not an editor for nothing)