|Reviews for No daddy|
| Two Ghosts in One Mirror chapter 1 . 10/6/2010
Poor Lucius's wife. It must be terrible to witness one's husband having passionate sex with a 'whole'. And what on earth does 'that girl needs a good wiping from her old man' mean? Sounds kinky. Oh, and how exactly does one turn a 'coroner'?
It goes without saying that the plot is laughably bad, all the characters are so far OOC they're practically from another planet entirely, and your grammar, spelling, general punctuation, capitalization, etcetera, etcetera are all absolutely dreadful. The reviewer could go on and on about your unfortunate ignorance as to the various forms of 'your' and 'there', your appallingly limited vocabulary, and your abysmal lack of subject-verb agreement.
Dear, in the future, do make a habit of typing with your eyes open, and remain conscious and alert during English class. Your 'writing abilities' (or lack thereof) indicate that you've sat through the entirety of your education with your fingers planted firmly in your ears. Perhaps, had this not been the case, you would have written a decent story.
| voldyismyfather chapter 2 . 11/22/2009
love itx x
| Refrigerator-Burn chapter 2 . 8/26/2009
STUPID LUCIUS! I HOPE YOUR LIFE IS RUINED! YOUR SUCH A TERRIBLE PERSON! HOW COULD YOU CHEAT ON HER? YOU JERK!
great story though! thats a bunch of unexpected twists on the story. im curious on where your going with this. update soon please! PLEASE.
| xxiceheartxx343 chapter 2 . 8/26/2009
update soon its really good
| christy86 chapter 1 . 4/15/2009
update soon can't wait for more chapters good work
| yumi2482 chapter 1 . 12/20/2008
| pesuasion chapter 1 . 12/15/2008
umm i like your story u still doing it?
| kiarcheo chapter 1 . 11/10/2008
really interesting!please update soon
| Refrigerator-Burn chapter 1 . 10/31/2008
wow! whats up with hermione? this is really good by the way. i like it. you should keep going. im...so...SLEPY! i have had had no sleep since forever! kk bye! have fun on halloween!
| Erm what chapter 1 . 10/30/2008
Way to break the english language.
| minerdude chapter 1 . 10/29/2008
I think it should be Harry, and her street smarts should help him