|Reviews for Unified Theory|
| paskinmath chapter 16 . 3/6
| The Third Biker Scholar chapter 16 . 2/19
so much fun! loved this!
| Preier chapter 16 . 1/8
disappointing. some interesting ideas but on the whole too many rehash of the plot points of IM.
overly competent antagonist, overly perfect antagonist plot, inexistent outside world (police forces? counterterrorism? bait or hostages, if that)...
and let's not forget a hero who barely goes above a stunner against murderers (until the AK-ex-machina)
ah well, it was five years ago, right...
| Preier chapter 12 . 1/8
yeah, because if you want to hit a flying target, tanks are the weapon of choice...
| sdoyle1989 chapter 16 . 10/16/2013
this story is great thanks for writing it!
| TheJadePhoenix chapter 1 . 9/11/2013
That last line... Just makes me think "father, son, holy ghost" lol
| Vaughn Tyler chapter 16 . 8/23/2013
| Centaurious chapter 16 . 6/16/2013
Why does Harry let an employee Bitch at him for spending his own money. Harry is a Millionaire/Billionaire and all people do is bitch at him. This does not make for an enjoyable read. It takes us back to JKR's 'It's fine to shit on me' Harry. If Harry is grown up and smart, educated, rich, and talented, he shouldn't be a door mat.
| 01saparker chapter 16 . 4/4/2013
I can't judge any of your other works or if this story was worse or better then them. I can say i enjoyed what i read in this piece and will look at you other stories
| purple sky always chapter 16 . 3/31/2013
Love the ending.
| JlovesGaara chapter 2 . 3/31/2013
Wow this is a seriously cool story so far!
| J.D. Finck chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
You are an excellent writer. Your sentence structure is strong, your dialog is crisp, and your channelization is excellent. The story line is very interesting, and you develop it well.
You should know that I am not a Harry Potter fan (there are a few of us, you know). I just never got into the books or films, so my knowledge of the material is basic, at best. Even so, I had little trouble following along, and that is testament to your considerable skill as a writer. You have the goods, my friend.
Two points of concern for me:
1. The first couple of chapters, while very well written, threw me off. I think that if you could find a way to reveal that back-story in a non 'flash back' way, it would help your story.
2. Iron Man...where is he? I am at chapter 7, and there has been precious little Tony. I get that this is a Potter-centric tale, but I think it would work even better if Tony got a chapter or two of focus by this point of the story. He is an awfully BIG character to just be regulated to the sidelines.
I stumbled across your story while skimming something else, and boy, what a find. I love to find actual writers on this site. Slash for slash's sake bores me silly, and vignettes that contain no plot or narrative do likewise. I like it when the characters I love remain at least somewhat recognizable, and there is some logic to what they do. You provide all the necessary ingredients for good fiction. After I finish this story, I will check out anything else you've written. If you feel so inclined, please check out my own work.
Good luck, and keep writing...
| Random number generator chapter 4 . 3/10/2013
I like this story, I dislike AN inside story.
| Random number generator chapter 2 . 3/10/2013
I am not happy that he made this machine, it would be far more interesting with wizards still needed to do magic.
Still, I was long looking for story where Statue of Secrecy got nuked.
| HarnGin chapter 7 . 3/4/2013
DOBBY was the first person hired. Gabby was second. Unless you don't consider Dobby a person.