Reviews for Structurally Unsound
Zatnikatel chapter 1 . 11/4/2008
Really enjoying this so far and I will definitely check out your other stories. I love the dialogue, and Claire's inner dialogue. Especially love the way Dean says it 'grandly'... that so sums him up. I've been looking for a word to describe the way he says things sometimes and that hits the nail on the head. I will file it away with another writer's [BigPink, maybe?] totally spot-on description of him as an emotionally needy serial killer...
Trish62 chapter 2 . 11/4/2008
Hey, this is really good! Nothing has been sparking my interest, but this did.

It's different, a bit AU and well written. Thanks for sharing,
ukfan101 chapter 2 . 11/4/2008
jeepers another evil cliffy...this story is good...fast moving but still time for angst and brotherly concern...great job...
deangirl1 chapter 2 . 11/4/2008
Poor Dean! and now Sammy's been hurt? He's never going to forgive himself for not going in, now... Is "Steve" a shout out to neonchica? Love that Claire gets Dean to settle by telling him its like a bad trip... I still think she's going to come through with something to replace the vicodin...
youthere chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
Great start!

Loved Claire's inner dialogue, it was vivid and believable... and embarrassingly familiar.

"aiding and abetting the government", "she’s trying not to be prejudiced, though it’s difficult when it comes to Republicans or government agents. It’s a flaw of character..."- Gold!
PADavis chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
I found this by chance and was very impressed. A deft touch on dialog, characterization of the boys, and OCs. A great sense of humor. I went back and read all your stories. I'm not a huge AU fan, but these are well written, compelling enough, and certainly enjoyable enough, to alert you. I'm really looking forward to another chapter.

Phoebe
neonchica chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
OK - you truly put me to shame! Here, I send you a few ideas and you've already got the first chapter up by the end of the same weekend. Yet me, I can't even get the next chapter of my story up for a few months.

Oh well, I'm not complaining. ANd I love the start of this story! You wrote Dean's collapse so well. So glad you got it up so quickly. I can't wait to see how you write Dean's injury and hospitalization. And the base story itself looks like it will be well developed and exciting as well. I'm so stoked! Thanks & happy writing.

~nc
happycabbage75 chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
Ha! This is awesome. Funny, quirky, some great Sam and Dean interaction with some great outside point of view thrown in. Not to mention a good cliffhanger... Gotta love that.
deangirl1 chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
Holy crap! That was Freakin' FANTASTIC! What a great start! Please, please, please tell me that you are posting again soon! What the heck is with Dean and the cabin! And why do I get the distinct impression that Sammy is gettin' some before the end of this story! I'm also betting that Dean is going to be gettin' some of those hydroponics - I mean... pain med's, right? (oh, yes... just a little bit of stoned Dean... I mean - that's CANON now!).

So many awesome moments in this chapter!

"She begins to feel like she’s in a bad porn movie, except without the porn. Just the sexy agents. Begone, anti-feminist thoughts!"

"Sam is never ever in a million years going to say this out loud, but he thinks Claire is kind of cute. In a crunchy, probably-doesn’t-shave-her-pits kind of way."

"If he lives to retirement age, he’s going to Texas. Hot, sunny, and armadillos. Awesome."

"Dean suddenly feels left out. Fuckin’ college kids. Though Sam was always kind of a closet hippie." Aw. Poor Dean... I loved it - you just nail the boys. So Please update soon? I'm dying to know what Dean's connection to this cabin it!
annv chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
I love it can't wait to see what wrong with Dean is Sam and the girl going to get together
ukfan101 chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
wow. evil cliffy and everything..glad that you are doing a longer "sequel" to the original story. Good start...makes me want to read more...and I loved the bit about bio-diesel and Dean's reaction to it...great!
Lacadiva chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
Great start to what will undoubtedly be a great story! Please update soon. I'm anxious to see what comes next.
sassafras224 chapter 1 . 11/2/2008
I love all of your stories- you portray the characters so vividly, and the dialogue (spoken and internal) is really well-written. Can't wait to read more!
gapdragon1 chapter 1 . 11/2/2008
Really like this - just that touch different - loved them both saying the opposite thing at the same time.
Skye21 chapter 1 . 11/2/2008
I heart cliff hangers... and Claire seems like a fun character. Can't wait for more :)
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