|Reviews for Verdant Enchantment|
| USMA2020 chapter 1 . 1/18/2013
That is so good. We always here the enchantment stuff with Edmund, but no one seems to think about how Rilian would be effected. Absolutely brilliant, and the end was so sweet. Loved the fun fact.
| Brigid Dove chapter 1 . 11/13/2011
I think you did very well writing an OC character. I have wondered about who Rilian wed, and this is a very nice idea to think about :)
I have not reviewed any of your other work, but I really enjoy your stories. The way you explain Peter's anger in the P.C. movie is a very good way to think about it. I really did not like the PC movie, mostly because of how they changed Peter from who he was in the book. I mean, he is an adult even if he does look like a child...
Any way, thanks for writing.
| Flavio S chapter 1 . 9/5/2011
Interesting story. But I wonder how did they had children?
| Crazy Dyslexic Nerd chapter 1 . 6/23/2011
My sister is looking at me strange for laughing. He gas green eyes! That was perfect.
| Susan M. M chapter 1 . 4/15/2011
No, Melia is NOT a Mary Sue, and she makes a good consort for Rilian. I liked the line about him being "one mandolin solo away from going mad." But with Rilian's mother a star's daughter and Rilian's wife an ash-tree nymph, I think it might be good idea (genetically speaking) for his daughter-in-law to be full human.
| Berserker Nightwitch chapter 1 . 1/9/2011
Trivia bit at the end was fun. I also found it amusing that his advisors thought he'd be re-enchanted upon encountering the color green, and - in a sense - that's what happened. Some do say that falling in love is like being put under a spell, and Melia was wearing green... Probably not a point you were trying to make, but I had to point it out.
Thanks for sharing!
| s. du jour chapter 1 . 10/15/2010
Hey, nice! I love your style of humour :) And Malia wasn't a Sue :)
I have a couple of wording suggestions that don't quite seem to fit the setting...
My actions were not fitting for a King of Narnia that I should be so inconsiderate to one of my subjects.
If I may say so, Your Majesty seemed rather preoccupied with your thoughts, for which I cannot fault a king with much to do.
The wording of these two sentences is very laborious.
Yes, well, my advisers were being a little…overbearing
That 'Yes, well,' is more modern than the rest of the style of the story. Ditto when Melia says 'Um'.
But my wording issues (yes, I have no life, you can say it :D) are just confined to that little section there-overall I really enjoyed your story!
| CherylSongbow chapter 1 . 11/9/2009
Creative, humorous, and absolutely wonderful!
| Taryn Streambattle chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
Where'd ye find that out about the Meliae?
Snicker. Dumb court.
| Aravir Theophila Morningstar chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
Beautiful tale, Lirenel. I am having quite a pleasant time reading your store of wares. Do keep writing!
I must agree with you though on your ending. As you said in your note at the bottom, the ending /was/ a bit rushed. Should you ever convince your self to add a bit onto the end it might make the transition slightly smother.
| Shadow-ofthe-Night35 chapter 1 . 6/28/2009
no, i like the last paragraph. I think it's funny, like the rest of the story. Funny, wonderful, and truly a Narnian thing to do-ban green. *giggle*
| RandomDream chapter 1 . 6/10/2009
Somewhat crack, but incredibly funny and smart. :)
| Artemis1000 chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
It's lovely! Funny and sweet at the same time. You don't need to worry about Melia being a Mary Sue at all, she's such a wonderful original character that I wish she were canon, if only so I'd get to read more about her.
| GeoffreyF chapter 1 . 1/10/2009
I don't like OCs either but I make an exception for Melia. She's fun and funny and very believable. In fact, in some ways she's an anti-Mary Sue - well-rounded, rooted in canon, no desperate crush on major character. As others have commented the "one mandolin solo away from going mad" was a great line, and I think the final paragraph was saved by the use of the word "spelunking"!
| Owl344 chapter 1 . 1/9/2009
I liked it, and the OC really wasn't Mary-Sueish. Of course, the story was also exceedingly funny. The wrapping-up paragraph could have been done better, I think, but that's all I've got to say that negative about the story-nicely written!