Reviews for Forbidden Apple
princesstinkerbell45 chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
i love it but its poetically tragically sad
Random Reviewer Strikes Again chapter 1 . 10/28/2009
Ok, I'm sure this was a great story and all...but I got through all of one paragraph before I quit. And now, my FLAMES are gonna kick in, but not like "OMG ARE YOU GAY OR SOMETHING?" flames. No, I'm busting out my grammar flames!

1) Ok, I don't know if you know this, but there's this thing called punctuation, ok? now USE IT!

2)Too...many...typos! Argh, my eyes!

3) General OOC, but that doesn't matter. Everyone does it.

You are lucky that you don't know who I am, 'cause if you read my stories, you would never want to be OOC again! They are the very DEFINITION of OOC.
Random Porn critic chapter 1 . 10/6/2009
2 words:

Run-on sentences
sux chapter 1 . 7/21/2009
Yep, third time is NOT the charm - still can't write.
mia-dcwut-09 chapter 1 . 4/4/2009
AGH poor jakey

Im in tears right now

I want him with edward (glares at bella)

well there be more plz
ForbalaTheGreen chapter 1 . 2/2/2009
o, that was good! again, you don't seem to like periods, but that's okay. if you just fix that, your fics would be amAHzing. i'll be your beta if you need one.
Utena-Puchiko-nyu chapter 1 . 1/21/2009
I like it.

Kisses from Argentina!
centuryshorty chapter 1 . 12/26/2008
That was pretty hot, good job on it
Wouldn'tYouLikeToKnow chapter 1 . 12/16/2008
...again. What IS IT with you people and punctuation? Is it so HARD to put in a "," or some quotes? JEEZUS!
Keedy Burdeshaw chapter 1 . 11/10/2008
I don't a ed jake smutt but this just seemed awkward and you should never use correct anitomical wording in smutt it just does not come across sexy.
kutoki chapter 1 . 11/10/2008
Aww poor Jacob.