|Reviews for Reconciling|
| Iniquitous Hero chapter 1 . 1/29/2009
I have to be honest, this isn't a very good story. The most obvious thing wrong is that everyone is completely out of character, not even just to make it a bit strange but enough that I'm convinced that aren't even based off of your impressions in the anime/manga. My advice is for you to think about different traits that they have in the anime/manga and make sure that what you have them saying/doing/thinking matches.
The next thing is the conversations, no one really talks like that. There's no depth to anything they say and the banter between characters gets to be ridiculous.
The only good thing I can say about your writing is that you have good spelling and grammer, which at least made sure I could understand what you were trying to say.
Be less shallow in your future writing and make sure that your readers can believe what you're writing, and it always helps your stories to have some sort of real plot (even if it's a humourous story) not just random antics that leads to nothing.
| Moonlightstreams chapter 1 . 12/11/2008
OKay, much better than you other story I reviewed.
| James Birdsong chapter 1 . 11/11/2008