|Reviews for Knives in the Dark|
| Never Morrison chapter 61 . 1/12
u.u Always sucks when you reach the end of an awesome story, only to discover that it's been years since the last update. -sigh-
| Tiresias-135 chapter 61 . 11/5/2013
Followed, just in case you ever decide to continue this or announce the rewrite.
Really like Gentleman of Weapons, btw...
| BossModeTribble chapter 61 . 7/15/2013
I quite like this.
I don't care how crappy an idea you think it is. /I/ think that even the craziest of plot bunnies can be amazing stories if they are given the proper care, and you are doing that. You are feeding this bunny and taking it for walks and if you keep it up, it will grow into a full-sized, wonderful bunny that...okay, I have no idea where this metaphor is going. But my point is, I think you make it work.
And now I find myself wanting more assassin!Sokka, whether I have to write it myself or not. My favorite chapters of this are 28-30, aka Phases One, Two, and Three, because it highlights just how different this Sokka is from canon Sokka, and exactly what he's capable of-as he calmly organizes a series of hits and carries them out easily, with a casual narration going on the entire time. I think it helps that that part doesn't have Mai in it, because that would interrupt the flow.
I do have a couple of Constructive Criticisms, though.
First off, I feel like Sokka and Mai sound a little too similar. There were a few times when I missed whether it said "Guardian" or "Assassin", and I couldn't tell by reading it. I don't know if you intended that, but they come across as very alike.
Second, Mai seems...out of character. Her thought processes are sarcastic (no surprise there) and go off on tangents (that feels a bit off, but okay) and then she does things like hum and trip over tree roots (which seems like it would get a "who are you and what have you done with Mai" reaction).
Third, your author's notes are self-disparaging. That doesn't seem like it helps your writing, and it comes across like you're trying to apologize for your story.
Don't apologize for writing it. You have 275 reviews-people like what you're doing. Bad stories don't get that kind of review volume.
So, okay, you don't think this was a good story idea. Okay, fair enough. But we like it, we think it is a good story idea...can you let us convince you?
All in all, I do think this is good. I won't tell you it couldn't benefit from a rewrite, but that's true of almost any story. I'd love to see it finished (I've been working my way through TV Tropes' A:tLa recommendation page, and I somehow got this mixed up with Distorted Reality and thought there was going to be a summary of the rest of the story, so when I got to the end I had mixed feelings because I was disappointed that I didn't know what was going to happen next, but also happy because it's on hiatus, not dead, so...)
Anyway, if you come back to this one, I'd read the rest.
| PoptartProdigy chapter 61 . 4/8/2013
Well, I'm sad to see this one died. I won't press you to finish it - although I'd be lying is I said I don't want you to - I'll simply say that it's an excellent story with a - yes, it is so - GENUINELY INTERESTING premise.
You're too hard on yourself.
No really, that's it. The premise is interesting, the execution is well done, the angst is easily woven in, I have a tough time containing my laughter at the funny bits, the characters are hilarious and terrifically done (Assassin!Sokka and Mai are my all-time favorites, and possibly some of the best-written characters I've ever had the chance to read) and there are no outstanding issues that I can call, with a straight face, noteworthy. The only distracting or annoying thing about your writing is the self-disparaging Author's Notes that continually cast aspersions on your work. Stop second guessing yourself; you write wonderfully, and I'm happy to read what you've done! I'm checking your profile for more stories *immediately*, based purely upon how much I enjoyed this one. Thank you for posting.
| Porahgon-X chapter 1 . 2/23/2013
I shan't dawdle and waste both my time and yours.
I shan't droll on and on about how much this needs to be updated.
I shan't ask anything of you.
I understand the burden of consistently updating. Sometime you can just give up on a story and not really want to go back to it, no matter how good it is.
So all I say is this: Thank You.
This so far from what I've read seems to be a great story...it is sprung hope in me for my future in a way I can't really explain without sounding way overly melodramatic. Not from the writing style, but from the popularity it shed on Ty Lokka.
Like I said, I can't explain it. Explaining the importance of air to a fish is impossible: things that make sense in one mind don't in another.
So just know this...and be proud of this...and revere this: you have considerably helped in the shaping of a young adult's life, one who is still figuring out his future.
| Babyuknowme13 chapter 61 . 1/2/2013
Wow...I didn't think I was going to like this. Seriously, I only clicked on this fic because I couldn't find ANYTHING else...Now I am firmly glad that I did. This is AWESOME! And I whole heartedly approve of using Mai as another POV. She's just all kinds of awesome! I like that both points of views are very sarcastic and this take on Sokka is beautiful! I can't wait to read more of your stuff!
Also...Don't abandon this! Please! I WANT to see what happens! That's so rare for me since most fanfic writers are actually really bad and have no business publishing things so it's a big deal to me!
| LandofMidnightRain chapter 1 . 10/30/2012
Hmm . . . well, this looks promising, and it was on the list of best Avatar fics on Tropes, so I'll give it a shot. ;)
| patrick the almighty observer chapter 61 . 9/20/2012
one great story so far, you have gone amazingly far with this and i actually like the story... a lot actually, two it seams that you have abandoned the story since you haven't updated it in around 3 years. which is really depressing for that to happen to a story that went for so long, i hope that at some point you will decide to pick this story up and finish it for all our sakes, or this will remain forever unfinished.
| EarthScorpion chapter 24 . 9/16/2011
Hmm. I see that Kuei has studied long and hard the ways of King Bumi of Omashu. The sheer genius that he puts into every single sentence, the layers of meaning and double-meaning... and even triple meaning... this man is a master of neutral jin, and I detect skill at negative jin, too. Azula has met her match, indeed.
... *begins shipping Kuei and Azula*
| EarthScorpion chapter 13 . 9/16/2011
Oh no! Moving without rhythm attracts the Toph! Quite unlike sandworms!
| sessha16 chapter 61 . 9/29/2010
this is another fic that have successfully entertained my boring work life... it's sad that it's left incomplete... i'm sure to miss the sarcams and funny things in this AU fic...
but i have to admit, i'm a little lost with where this was going though... /... but again, the sarcasm was fun...
| The Polyethylene Man chapter 2 . 9/8/2010
so when does sokka stop being a faceless assassin?
| dundee998 chapter 33 . 9/3/2010
You read Discworld. I know this for a fact. You referenced Nanny Ogg's description of Granny Weatherwax's snores accurately, but what is even more telling, what REALLY showed that it wasn't just coincidence, is that you spelled 'disk' as 'disc' when describing the tile. Still haven't figured out who the interviewer is, though. Anything to do with the CSI shows? Cause the only show I'm familiar with along that vein is NCIS, and only vaguely. The only other show that could be even remotely connected to this type of character that I know of is Bones.
| dundee998 chapter 16 . 9/3/2010
Why is Mai so amusing? She has no right to be this hilarious. I think she may have become one of my favorite characters.
| dundee998 chapter 8 . 9/3/2010
... This story is bizarre. But good. Actually, just this chapter is bizarre. It is quite fascinating. I am looking eagerly towards the rest of the story.