|Reviews for Wild World|
| Loatroll chapter 5 . 5/10/2009
Argh dude! :D The chapters (I just started reading an hour or two ago) ended just when things were getting even more interesting!
Great work! I love the story so far, and you've really managed to salvage graduation-cannon-Naruto from being.. an idiot to someone one can actually like and respect, it's also a lot easier empathize with this Naruto because he doesn't just take it.
Good point there on judges.
Really great work! Really looking forward to more :-)
| kyuubi shadow chapter 5 . 5/9/2009
| wellheupdated chapter 5 . 5/7/2009
nice to know your still alive...
| Rago Dragovian chapter 5 . 5/6/2009
Lol. Great story. So, which will you update this or Houses? I hope you don't abandon either of them.
| PMON chapter 1 . 5/5/2009
I read all your stories and you are the first new author whose work has interested me in quite some time, so it was great to get to read some new material instead of waiting for updates. I like the pacing of your stories, and even though it takes time to see events that I am excited for, it would spoil your stories for the action to proceed faster. Good job all around.
| mfmxxx chapter 5 . 5/5/2009
Have Naruto join the Akatsuki? :P
| Fritter chapter 5 . 5/2/2009
I've been running into a strange number of fics today that involve Naruto with the Rinnegan. I absolutely love what you are doing with this story! Everything from Naruto not trusting anybody enough to show them his eyes to his growing resentment towards the village has been skillfully woven together. It is especially interesting that, bloodline or no, this is exactly the type of interaction he may have had with Sasuke in the manga if he had shown anything remotely like the type of progress he has attained in this fic.
In any case, I would like throw in the obligitory "Update Soon" and hope that you continue this story at the quality that you have kept thus far.
| viel12 chapter 5 . 5/1/2009
very interesting story you have here. hope to more of it soon.
| uo-chou chapter 5 . 4/30/2009
Excellent chapter. Please keep up the great work. I hope Naruto does something completely unexpected. :)
| FenrisLupus chapter 5 . 4/29/2009
This is turning out to be very entertaining fanfic, Howdie. Glad to see you're still updating, been keeping my eyes on it for a couple of months. I am liking your focus on ninjutsu technique, and your ideas for how they could work, especially paired up with the theorized intuitive aptitude of the Rinnegan. It makes for exciting nerd reading. Like sci-fi and fantasy had a freakish offspring. Hurr.
The secondary characters are characterized beautifully, and I especially love the interaction between team 10 and Naruto. Naruto Shikamaru intimacy through Ino is hilarious no matter how you look at it.
Your technical writing, as in: Grammar, spelling, general structure of the chapters are well beyond my own capabilities, so I can't I find anything lacking in that department. I have always found you well-worded and structured in your forum post on Narutofan. So hey, good going?
Now that I have stroked your ego, I mean pointed out what I feel is the strong sides of your story, there are a few things I have noticed in the other direction as well. It's not really criticism as much as a couple of watch-outs. While your side-characters are well done, I feel that you have a tendency to over-focus on Sasuke's negative characteristics, Sasuke is an asshole, agreed, but it feels a bit exaggerated at times. It comes off as a bit jarring when he insults the goggles, for example. Maybe it is like that because the story is told from Naruto's perspective, or for some other neat literary reason, but if so it doesn't hit the target. When I read the chapters, it hit me more like "Hey check this asshole out, look how assholey he is, rite?" than anything else. I thought the same about Sakura in the start, but I must say that you gave her some dimension later in the story. Lastly I get the feeling that you're soapboxing a bit with Naruto. It is maybe a bit too clear that he is the mouthpiece in this story. It's good that he does face some karma from the authority figures, it makes him feel like less of the author's pet. I don't think you're writing them out of character, the point is that sometimes you're edging dangerously close. You've also kept powerlevels(as much as I abhor that expression) reasonable, though just as with the characterization, I think you edge towards overpowering them at an early age.
On the other hand Naruto is wielding the most illustrious of the eyes that can bring salvation to the world or bring it all back to dust and whatnot, so I guess it makes sense within the confines of the story. I will acknowledge that this is your sandbox fic, so you can do whatever you damn well please, the important thing is that you are having fun, after all. I know I am having fun reading it. I wish you best of luck as you plunge headfirst into the chuunin exam, a lot of fics tend to stagnate at that part, I hope it will not be the case with this one. Cheers.
| volrath77 chapter 5 . 4/28/2009
Damn. Someone recommended this story and I'm glad I have it a shot. Looking forward to the next update.
| Stygian Styx chapter 5 . 4/28/2009
| the panda chapter 5 . 4/27/2009
don't know if i like naruto's pessimistic attitude very much. I think that right now he's acting more like a brat then somebody that has been persecuted and shunned. Even if he's had a rough life and the villagers don't respect him i don't think that naruto should be using the demon he obviously should hate as a trump card in social situations.
| the panda chapter 2 . 4/27/2009
so...naruto has the rinnengan?
| D3571nyBan3 chapter 5 . 4/27/2009
Bam badum badum. Bam bam!
I've been doing that a lot lately.