Reviews for Don't You Put It In Your Mouth
Guest chapter 1 . 9/5/2013
adorablee
sesshomaru8675309 chapter 1 . 5/4/2011
i want MOAR give me MOAR MOAR MOARRRRRRRRRR!

it was awesome :)
cyberangle chapter 1 . 11/5/2010
ooohhhhh yay...but why in the pantry?
fdsfsd chapter 1 . 12/23/2009
M I liked it! It was very hot
Free Beloved Army chapter 1 . 12/16/2009
EE! This is awesome! I love it!
Koneko-Hiruka chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
It was very good besides some of it seemed crammed together. Maybe you could space it out more. Here let me give you an example. First I'll put how you have it.

Hikaru licked his lips in anticipation, “What was it that mom always told us not to do when we were younger?” Kaoru’s face faltered for a moment at the sudden change in his brother’s thought process. “A lot of things I guess, you want to be more specific?” In the silence that followed they could hear the slight clattering of the servants down the hall, apparently supper was going to begin being prepared. “You know, when we’d play around in the garden and get mud all over our faces.”

Now let me put more spacing in it.

Hikaru licked his lips in anticipation, “What was it that mom always told us not to do when we were younger?”

Kaoru’s face faltered for a moment at the sudden change in his brother’s thought process.

“A lot of things I guess, you want to be more specific?”

In the silence that followed they could hear the slight clattering of the servants down the hall, apparently supper was going to begin being prepared.

“You know, when we’d play around in the garden and get mud all over our faces.”

Now does that seem easier to read? But that is only when there is speech that way it is easier to recognize the speech. Other than that I enjoyed reading it. I hope this helps you.
animelvr23 chapter 1 . 1/28/2009
KAWAII! I LOVE IT SO MUCH! ja ne! PLEASE UPDATE! ASAP!
087 chapter 1 . 1/23/2009
goo
Akiame Bara chapter 1 . 1/23/2009
awesome story!

r you gonna make a sequal for this?
Shinku Getsuei chapter 1 . 1/10/2009
m that was so sexy...

maybe this will help describe it...

when i first started reading the story i was really cold, like almost shivering...

now, im QUITE warm...
Unrelenting chapter 1 . 12/17/2008
hell yes! u will the grand mater if u right a lemon for them!
Hijiri Tezuka chapter 1 . 11/29/2008
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Me chapter 1 . 11/27/2008
I liked it. Full of interaction and some humor - and can't forget the lime. ;)
River-kun chapter 1 . 11/21/2008
“Hikaru, Kaoru, don’t you put that in your mouth.” lol anyways great story
uchiha-senna chapter 1 . 11/20/2008
i want more i know i know im a pervert but its so good!
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