|Reviews for I shouldn't love you|
| mia chapter 1 . 6/20/2014
| Twitchylicious chapter 1 . 4/1/2010
The format was a bit hard to follow, but still loved the story!
| Warlock In Disguise chapter 1 . 4/10/2009
Yeah, I went crazy after reading this. But in the good way!
Still, it does weird that they kissed in the end, and I mean really weird. It also seemed odd how you put all the chapters on one page, but then again, that would have made it seem to short. I also had a hard time telling when another chapter was starting.
I mean, you could've made the titles of the chapters bold or underlined.
Dude, don't take this as an insult, it's just constructive criticism.
| JoeMerl chapter 1 . 11/20/2008
I like GIR's message...exactly what he would have written. :-) Anyway, the basic format of this story was a little sloppy-if you were going to make it divided into chapters, it seems like you should have set it up as different chapters rather than in one-shot form. And the POV switched a bit too much, especially with the "Beginning/End" comment-if you had just kind of put a break there and then started I think it would have been fine. And the whole Zita thing kind of went unresolved-is this supposed to be, like, part 1 of a series? (The fact that there's a character on the show named Zita makes it doubly confusing.) Anyway, sorry, yeah, that's a lot of little critiques, but this was pretty good. You captured GIR particularly well.