|Reviews for The Last Temptation of Dean Winchester|
| Dean's evil little hunter chapter 6 . 1/10/2009
Ha! Well if anyone could kill a duccumbus by having sex with it...it'd be Dean. lol.
| jasper03 chapter 7 . 1/9/2009
Poor Dean...I would have loved to see him in more pain and conflict with his feelings regarding what happened to him. I loved it though. So smutty. :) You should write more stories like this. I'd read it and I can think of a few of my friends that would also. One more thing, you should most definitely join the 100 word drabbles. Ask Enkidu07 or Onyx Moonbeam about the rules and stuff. Lots of fun! I think you'd be great at it. ;) So yeah, good job on this. I really enjoyed it!
| Dean's evil little hunter chapter 5 . 1/5/2009
Ha! Succubus comin' after Sammy, That's funny.
I hope you don't feel like I was jumpin' all up in your shit with the stuff I said before. I was just trying to help.
I'm happy that you liked the line I re-wrote, though. I haven't been to college or anything like that like you did. Hell, I haven't even been writing that long, I'm only eighteen. I only have two stories up on here. The only good one is my Supernatural one. lol. So, feel free to ignore me from time to time. lol.
Liked the chapter though.
| jasper03 chapter 5 . 1/5/2009
OMG! I just read this all the way through and I am burning up! That was so hott! I hope Dean isn't a father though, that's just creepy...Love it! Keep it Up!
| Dean's evil little hunter chapter 4 . 1/3/2009
Better. Still need a little work with you writing, but you have style. That's all that matters, the rest you can learn. For instance try to avoid the 'he said, she said' stuff.
I'll re-write one of you lines for you as an example.
(“That was incredible,” he said to her, kissing her again as they lay on the floor.)
Try this instead.
Dean kissed her again as they lay on the floor. "That was incredible."
I hope you don't find me a bitch or anything, someone told me all this stuff once and my writing is so much better for it. I'm just trying to return the favor.
This chapter made me laugh a few times though, I like your sense of humor.
| Dean's evil little hunter chapter 3 . 1/2/2009
This isn't bad, I'm suprised you only have one review so far.
Little tip: get a little more down and dirty with the sex. lol. More people will read it, it's always funner. lol.
| williewildcat chapter 1 . 11/22/2008
Please keep this going! This is an interesting turn...Sounds like a succubus to me! Keep it up!