|Reviews for The Ring|
| DTFrogget chapter 1 . 11/26/2008
wow. new take. MY BRAIN HURTS!
and now for my exit
-takes a kitten out of pocket. takes another. looks confused. reaches into other pocket and wave upon wave of kittens come pouring out. climbs into boat, also in the pocket, and sails away. singing about stars.-
| Telcontar Rulz chapter 1 . 11/24/2008
The writing itself isn't bad, but can you please not underline every single bit of text? It makes reading very difficult.
Also, I don't see what this has to do with The Lord of the Rings. Why would the One Ring have fallen into the hands of a man?
The second sentence is agrammatical. I think you meant to write. "It was shiny and golden; light reflected off its smooth and unadorned surface."
This would make a good prologue, but as a oneshot, it is extremely inadequate.