Reviews for Dark Chocolate |
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![]() ![]() Your story was ok. |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw! that was so sweet! they defitnetly belong together! loved Roxy's dress. and Axel's reaction to his 'date' was especially when he just dropped her and glided over to roxas obviously dousn't like I loved the ending. Axel deserves the best from Roxas,including his love.w |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw! Those two belong together! Loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The plot was, overall, pretty good. I liked it. The ending was sweet. The style in which it was written in...? I didn't like it so much. There were too many conjunctions and some things were over-described...rather...could've been described in better ways. There were some grammatical errors as well. I recommend finding a beta and having them take a look over it. ~Jayden PS, Keep writing. It's good. Just not great yet. But it's well on its way. n.~ |