Reviews for Devious
QUEENSPELLER67 chapter 1 . 3/7/2016
Wow. Farla actually left a compliment. That's a first.
My review: Nice one. A little eerie and kinda gross at the end, but it was good.

Eagle out.
Farla chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
Hm, nicely done. A couple of times your extended metaphor gets a bit jumbled - "All the time Galatea was overhead, swirling around him like planets in orbit" - makes it sound like Galatea is the one swirling. You should make it clear you're referring to his duties here. For the most part, it works well and makes a nice counterpart to the rising action.

I'm not sure capitalizing sun was a good idea - or, if you do, it might be better to capitalize galaxy too. "But she was the galaxy, and the Sun was a part of that." looks inconsistent.
Indigo Tantarian chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
This is great. I can definitely see that happening! And I think it's entirely likely that Team Galactic existed before Cyrus. Galatea seems believable as a leader, except that she struck me as a little too ambitious in the beginning to give up so easily in the end.

I enjoyed this a lot!
Jarkes chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
Holy crap.
Cerulean City chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
Interesting...very very interesting...

~The Laughing Man,

Axletia Rosonetis chapter 1 . 12/5/2008
Hmm...Cyrus knows how to kill people in a good way, but so young...

...For some reason I think of him as needing Botox, and if he doesn't get it, then he starts to look like Pluto.

But maybe that's just me. (And it has a lot to do with his skin, so maybe he's some kinda supernatural creature that Arceus accidentally created while making Darkrai...)

So...other than that, you kept Cyrus in-character, so...good job.