Reviews for Seth and Ivory: A Vampire Story
vampireluver1613 chapter 7 . 1/18/2009
Oh my goodness, this is definitly my favorite story of all time. The characters are great, and I love the world they live in! Its a horrible place but its very interesting! I felt so bad for her when she had to give Seth the shot... And the zoo trip was a good idea too, it makes sense and it freaked them out. This story is written very well, you describe things in detail well and put in enough dialouge so that it balances out well. Its so easy to become attached to your characters and want for them to end up well. I cant wait for the power to change! I want to see whats going to happen so much! PLEASE PLEASE PLEAASE UPDATE SOON!
xxxdivinecomedyxxx chapter 7 . 1/14/2009
I'm loving your story, it's awesome, I'm totally hooked

I hope you keep on writing
Perfect love kills all fear chapter 7 . 1/8/2009
Love the story so far. I can't wait until the power switches to see what exactly happens. But it can't all be perfect so that's where conflict comes in. Well update soon.

Perfect love kills all fear
Arsonist chapter 7 . 1/8/2009
Love ur story! Please continue posting chapters. I'm dying to read more!
Nova Ride chapter 7 . 1/8/2009
I picture a huge white house with black shutters when I picture Ivory's house, with bage carpet and such, but that's just me xP.
Owen Marx chapter 7 . 1/4/2009
you are TOATLY nice, you'd be even nicer if u updated in the next few days. *gets down on knees and begs with cute little puppy dog eyes*
MollyRose3417 chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
loved it! seriously, i really really realy loved this story. and i really dont think its needed to write out what her house looks like, everybody pretty much has their own image by now, im sure.

soo please update quickly! and i dont mean in like a month!
edwardcullen003 chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
Your story is so AWESOME! I liked how you did a flashback from Seth. I think it would have been better if you told us what Luke looked like. And I liked how they went to the zoo. What they were doing to that one vampire was really sad though. I never thought about vampires having a blood bar, but the way you said it makes sense. I really can't wait for the sides to be switched and the Vampires to be in power! Thanks for the extra long chapter ;) Please update soon! Thanks,

rocktheroxie chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
this is rreally good keep it goingxD
mme toffee chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
Well here I go with another really long review...

I think that at the beginning with the flash back, it was very sweet. I feel like there should've been more description about the physical contact and how they looked at each other. I would've liked to know Ivory's thought process on the whole scene, but since it was Seth's dream that's not really possible.

The show at the zoo was very well done. I thought, when he came out with a bird, that it was going to be a bird show. And, then i thought to myself 'Wouldn't it be a good idea to have a Vampire show?'. And you did! I was very happy, but my one question about that is: Why did he come out with a bird in the first place?

When Ivory left, I expected Seth to lash out again, like he did in the last chapter, but instead he just watched. I thought that how he followed her scent was very vampirey (is that a word?). I appreciated that because I feel that the story was getting away from the fact that Seth is a Vampire.

I really like the fact that he thinks that she is really pretty when she cries. That's sweet. I think that they really do have feelings for each other, but what will happen when power changes.

Luke's visit was very 'FORESHADDOWING' (haha. Thank you Mrs. Smyth. My english teacher). It said in 7 to 15 years, but I'm expecting it to come soon. I'm hoping by chapter 15 at the latest. I want to know how Seth and Ivory's relationship will change. I think that Ivory will be scared, and Seth will eventually lash out at her. But, that's just my prediction.I think that they'll still love each other though. That won't change.

At the restaurant, I really liked the waitress. I kind of wished that she would become a main character because she was so nice to Seth and wasn't freaked out by his request for blood. I really hope nothing bad happens to her when the power changes. She may be my favorite character out of everybody.

About the shot, what is Ivory going to do about that? Is she going to give it to him? No. What will her mom do when she comes home and sees that Ivory didn't give Seth the shots?

By the way, what ever happened to Ivory's neighbor. I thought that he would be a major part in this story. Not just in 1 chapter.

Happy New Year,

Love Thalia :-D
HeartlessFallenAngel chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
Great work! Loved the length! You took an eternity to update! Hm...The house, yeah you could do that if you want, I would like to know what you think her house looks like. :D

Update soon!
JadedFoxFire chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
Personally, I'd love to get a description of the house. I really like this offer.

Great Chapter. Please update when you can!
deemed-unecessary chapter 7 . 1/2/2009
i thought this chapter was really, really great.

VERY nicely written and i didnt really spot any spelling or grammar errors to complain about, hehe.

the scenarios were very nice, i especially liked the first one that went back in time. the characters were fantastic, as always.

as for the house description . . . i dunno. i never really thought about it before and somehow from your writing i got a picture of it in my head nevertheless. for me, i dont think it would be necessary. but if you want to, it might be a nice touch still.

keep writing:)
Kelli Shayne chapter 7 . 1/1/2009
I'm reviewing and I'm loving you and this story. I think that you should do a description of the house.I'm interested as to how it looks.
c.a.s.1404 chapter 7 . 1/1/2009
yeah a house chapter will be good...i was beginning to wonder what it looked like so yeah...i loved the chapter it was cant wait for the next...loved the zoo even through i hated the people for great job!
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