|Reviews for All the Little Children|
| Alyssa Halliwell chapter 7 . 7/28/2009
I really liked this, the whole hive mentality with the kids was creepy, and there were quite a few times that I just wanted to slap Anthony :)
I admit, I was relieved when it turned out that it wasn't somehow Andy killing the people.
Loved the last paragraph as well
| graceofgod chapter 7 . 3/6/2009
Just gonna jump straight in with the favourite lines - 'cause I've only just started, and I think there's going to be quite a few...
"Anthony blushed, adolescent hormones and anger combined. Dean smiled. He could think about porn all damn day if he had to." Heh heh - payback! That's gotta sting Anthony, fearless, evil leader blushing. It's that touch of dark humour again, that makes this so readable.
"Something wet trickled into his mouth, hot and salt and copper. Tears. Blood." And... there goes the humour. Love me some hurt, disoriented Dean. Have to wonder who called his name, Sammy? Almost hope it wasn't, because then Sam's there and he can't stop the torture.
That image of Sam stopping the kids is just beautiful. Terrible and horrific, Dean's shock at seeing him, the undercurrent of fear driving him on through the denial is perfect characterisation.
"Sam was at his side then, the real Sam, pulling him up and they moved together." In sync, in time with each other - would've loved to have seen a little more of Dean's reaction to Sam coming back to him here, though that could just be because I don't want this story to end...
"And because he didn’t think he knew what the word okay meant anymore." Lovely way to describe the aftermath of the events, the way he can't quite manage to get past the fragments he allows himself to remember and start to heal.
"“It seemed to make you feel better, though, when nothing else would work. I would try everything, man, but what does a six-year-old really know about making the bad things all better for his little brother?”" Oh, the sub-text here - listen to him Sam!
"Sam smelled dirt in the air, dusty and dry and nomadic," - that right there is one of the most beautiful lines I've ever read. It holds so much in just a few words - their lives, endlessly roaming the country, looking for he next hunt, the next crisis; the world turning yet feeling almost as if they're outside it somehow; the sense of time slipping through his fingers like dust/sand.
"The things I’ll do for you scare the shit out of me sometimes," Love the echo of Dean's line in Devil's Trap, the same sentiment but given a whole new dimension here. We've seen what he did when Dean was hurting, the next line - "the things I’ll do without you are too awful to think about," takes it that one step further. They both know Sam's potential after this, and I think they both fear it. Dean's refusal to believe Sam is that 'monster' (it's a difficult word to use out of context!) seems to ring hollow, as if he know's damn well what Sam could become without him. I think maybe he's starting to wonder, here, if he did the right thing after all in making the deal. Not so much in bringing Sam back, but in giving up his life and soul to do so, and with them his presence to save his brother.
"Dean staring where the sun used to be and Sam huddled in darkness of his own making." Wow. What an ending. Such a gorgeous image, so dark and brooding (they do that look well, don't they?), somehow menacing even though it feels almost resigned as well.
This story takes some loose ends from canon, and although it's AU now it ties them up (even if only to leave them dangling again!). It's scary and riveting, peopled with believable chracters you love to hate, and you caught the boys' voices perfectly. Fantastic stuff!
| graceofgod chapter 6 . 3/6/2009
What a 'lovely' way to progress the relationship between Sam and the kids. It's somehow so much more human - and young! - that they get impatient and start trying to persuade/provoke him to join them - which of course makes it all the more horrifying. And then leaving Sam there, trying to ignore the man's pleas,without ever going into gruesome detail. Kripke made a comment on an early DVD extra, that what is unseen is much more terrifying, and that definately holds true in this fic! Leaving our twisted little imaginations to come up with all sorts of unpleasantness is so effective, and the few little hints: "Screaming his lungs out. By the sound of it, that might not actually be a figure of speech," "Tell him why you sit there and let Wilson do THAT to him," and all at the hands of a cute kid with a chipped tooth. *shivers*
And that future vision - so vivid I could almost smell the smoke, and the blood on his hands - "thick, warm" - almost feels like it's comforting him somehow. Poor Sammy. I'm rooting for him to just hold on, 'cause Dean's coming! But somehow, I knew nothing was gonna be quite that simple, and now I know why!
Some wonderful lines here - "He felt stupid, but he looked for signs on the buildings they drove by. He didn’t expect a flashing Sam’s Right Here notice or a huge arrow. Not sincerely." - Hoping though. Hoping so hard. Almost as if it's all he has left. Then, "He could find neither the shore nor his brother" - seems like even hopes draining away, even though he knows Sam's close by.
"Bobby grinned sheepishly, and Dean tried to do the same." This just screams out his exaustion. He's hurting, and he can't even find that smile. Wanna hug him and make it all better...
"He was in the air until he wasn’t anymore" -lovely turn of phrase to describe this, it really highlights the jarring confusion of the attack, taking him completely unawares.
Phew! This review is getting as long as the chapter... On to the next, and sadly last one now. Expect another mammoth reviewing session on that! (I you don't leave me speechless, anyway.)
| graceofgod chapter 5 . 3/6/2009
This story is a wonderful rollercoaster - despair to confusion to fear to hope... And yet you manage to lighten it in just the right places with odd little touches of humour - the "evil secret service", and the "mini-Sam's" that keep it bouncing along, dragging us along for the ride.
Throw in a few plot twists that are completely unexpected, yet so blindingly RIGHT for the story arc, and this is fantastic stuff!
| graceofgod chapter 4 . 3/6/2009
I know I'm reading & reviewing this way after the fact, but I know how you feel. It can be gutting, sometimes, to write something you know dam well is good and see it drift by, seemingly unnoticed while other fics just keep on piling up the reviews. I've been lucky enough to find a few friends who smack me upside the head when I get fed up with it, so: BE NUDGED! This is one of the best stories I've read on this site, and as soon as I've finished it, I'll head over and carry on working my way through the back catalogue.
Re: the story - yikes! Freaky hive, Sam-looky-likey kiddywinks, exhausted and bleeding Dean (so yeah, I'm a Dean girl, especially Dean whump...) - love it!
| graceofgod chapter 3 . 3/6/2009
You know, I'm really glad I'm reading this after it's completed. If I had to wait for an update after that... who boy. Tense, mysterious with a jaw-dropping cliffie - love it! Now I'm off to read more. Whoot!
| Visionairy chapter 7 . 2/3/2009
I just finished the story and the last chapters were palpable. You tied it all together very well. I didn't know how you were going to arrange for Dean to save Sam under those circumstances, but his just being there for him is the perfect solution in this situation.
I liked it that you had Sam so horrified by the rending of Veda that he was temporarily catatonic. It emphasized his humanity just before he reacted to Dean's torture and went dark side. My favorite lines there were: "“No!” Sam shouted. “NO!” And that was when Dean’s world shattered into a million pieces.
and ... "Dean knew it was going to hurt. Nothing could hurt more than knowing Sam was this thing before him."
Can't wait to read more! Have you thought of writing a sequel to this?
| Visionairy chapter 4 . 2/2/2009
Wow, this is a really great story! I love your idea of an army of little Sams, it makes sense that they'd send a army of kids that would look up to him. (Yet, I haven't seen a story with that idea before.) It also makes it particularly creepy that they are so young and evil. I really like the way you've written this as well - with both of them doing everything they can think of to help protect the other -yet losing control of the situation all the same.
I'm just starting on Chapter 5 now, can't wait to see what's going to happen next!
| Sue Pokorny chapter 7 . 1/31/2009
Hey- I just recently found your fics and have to say I absolutely love them! Still have a couple to go, but I am enjoying them tremendously. You write the boys so well and bring so much tension to the story. Thanks for the efforts and don't worry about the reviews, I know what you mean. They'll come. There are just so many writers in this fandom, it takes a while for people to find the quality ones. I have quite a few on alerts, so I tend to stick to those, but I will be adding you, so keep up the good work!
| zuimar chapter 7 . 1/1/2009
Hi there, just a quick note to let you know that I've just read all 7 chapters you've posted, I really loved your story! Great job! Have a great 2009!
| Linnie McCary chapter 7 . 12/30/2008
Beautiful observation: "He wondered how the same sun could cast such different light on him than it did on Dean."
Poor Sammy! Absolutely no offense intended to you, but I sure hope Krip doesn't ultimately send him where you did, because that's one DARK place!
AWESOME last line, SBG, and on the whole? Fabulously depressing. Now, for me, "depressing" can only be fabulous because, as you said, your story has strayed to AU during the past year and we have the luxury/comfort of knowing that things didn't go down the way you depicted. Consequently, I can indulgently wallow a little and think, "Gee, isn't it wonderful how really terrible that is for our boys?" LOL
In any event, another great job, and by far the best of the little lot that made the Christmas journey with me to No-Netland. Thanks again for sharing, and Happy New Year!
| Linnie McCary chapter 5 . 12/30/2008
Lovely job with the description of the children's appearance in the last chap (the "curtain drawn" line), and Bobby is spot-on in this one.
| Linnie McCary chapter 3 . 12/30/2008
I was horrified (in a good way!) AGAIN, this time by the super job you did with this vision. You've got the knack, grrl!
I loved the deceptively casual placement of this grounding sentence: "In the otherwise silent room, the plink of water from a leaky bathroom sink faucet resonated loudly."
| Linnie McCary chapter 2 . 12/30/2008
Sam's utter collapse was horrifying-well done!
The end of this chapter made me very glad that I generally don't read WIPs, because I needed instant gratification about what came next. Great pace, great suspense.
| Linnie McCary chapter 1 . 12/30/2008
Hiya, C. I'm back, and I had a great time reading your fic. Thanks for sharing it.
Super job, setting up a creepy, gruesome vision *shudders*
I loved Dean's switch from worried to "calm and collected again, just like that."
"Death was Dean's middle name now, and Darkness Sam's own." Not sure how to describe my reaction to that line, but it's an awesome, chilling motto of sorts.
Deft sidelining of Missouri (wise, too, I think). Loved Sam ribbing Dean about her-"meaniehead." *chortles*
Dang! End of this chap? I was completely intrigued by what would happen next!