|Reviews for Final Fontier: Hoenn Style!|
| TheLegendaryGuy chapter 9 . 10/23/2016
The story seems to be going great and all, but you sure are not the best while writing battles.
I mean, look at it. He almost lost to Slaking, knowing that its focus punch would be a hard blow on Pikachu, and still doing nothing. On top of that, it was against Max, a rookie trainer. Next, he lets his fast Swellow gets hit by rollout and two take downs, by a slow pokemon like Donphan. Ash does nothing other calling the pokemon's name, and pleading them to get up. In this chapter itself, bullet seed would deal neutral damage to Garchomp, it being a part ground type. You knew that, right?
About Absol and Pikachu fight, after that slash, Pikachu landed infront of Ash, and Hyper Beam does take time to travel across the whole field. But again, Ash does nothing other than calling Pikachu's name.
Not flaming you or something, I'm just pointing out the mistakes, for improving the writer. Maybe you've already improved... Maybe you stopped writing.. Who knows...
| raichukiller chapter 29 . 3/5/2014
| Guest chapter 29 . 1/2/2014
I really hope you do make a sequel to this story. You really should make a sequel because of that sence in that other chapter about the girl and called ash dad. I'll be waiting for a sequel.
| 26Naruto26 chapter 10 . 11/4/2013
Good story, not for me though... I like reading stories where Ash actually wins a battle...
| 26Naruto26 chapter 9 . 10/13/2013
Wow you really are ash suckin this story, almost halfway through it and ash has one won a single battle
| raichukiller chapter 15 . 8/12/2013
| Guest chapter 9 . 3/20/2013
Sneaky bastard. We all know that Sacul is Lucas backwards. We've all done it. Great story, by the way. :-)
| Red Lightning Bolt chapter 5 . 11/25/2012
Um, one question. How the hell did Brock get there?
| Rychan6 chapter 29 . 9/2/2012
I love this story
| I got enough chapter 7 . 8/3/2012
" the building and everything is fine. All the equipment inside need to be replaced and the building needs major repair inside and out" brock said. I thought everything is fine? So why replace and repair? I suggest a rewrite. bye. . .
| Error in ch5 chapter 5 . 8/3/2012
You gave brock a dailog but you did'nt mentioned that he has arrived. And the Frontier Brain keito said that Ash did good when the truth is he did'nt. Just like his battle againts Max.
| Nick-West chapter 5 . 4/21/2012
The story is amazing but you forget one thing : when Brock appear!
| PichuAuraGuardian18 chapter 29 . 10/21/2011
This is an awesome story! Love how Ash has a little sister and an older brother! I usually don't like the idea of the possibility of Giovanni being Ash's dad, but you made it work! Plus, my absolute fav shipping! Keep on writing these awesome stories!
| ALIASECHO chapter 5 . 7/17/2011
You spelled Ash's Pokemon's Name wrong, it's Glalie not Gailie
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/25/2010
happy very late b-day
also i might of scimmed a bit but did you add brock during the challenge?
still liked it. second time reading