|Reviews for Great Indoors|
| bookish327 chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
Like other reviewers have written, I would never guess that this fic HADN'T BEEN beta'ed because you have such a talent for writing and characterization, as well as punctuation, spelling, varying sentence structure, etc. Although I agree with the reviewer who wrote that almost every author should have a beta, you are really the exception to that rule. If you STILL want to raise your game by getting one, then great; but don't feel as if we're suffering out here when we're reading your un-beta'ed work. I'm one of those readers who truly does notice when an author forgets commas, misspells words, and is inconsistent with canon information, and you rarely do these things, if ever.
On to the review... I really enjoyed how you wrote Booth and Brennan. You write her so well, without caricaturing her and her unique struggles to relate to others. Booth is also VERY in character, and his words and actions were just like the Booth we know from the show.
I felt for the two of them as they fumbled through their differences to try to come together as partners, good friends (and maybe more) after the pivotal scene in the observation room. Things don't come easily to them, and you wrote this fic so well. I especially liked when you wrote how hard Brennan is on herself, how she beat herself up for forgetting the Booth that she knew because of the flirtatious words of his charming brother. I also liked how you wrote her acknowledging to herself how she failed him as a friend after he had taught her so much about connecting with others. THIS is the Brennan that some people can't see (or can't write very well, possibly): the highly self-critical overachiever who really wants to have meaningful relationships with others but is so afraid to do so in case she screws it up (because she probably feels it's HER fault that she has been left all her life by those she loved). She might hide behind rational thought, but that doesn't negate her core fear that she's essentially unlovable.
The humor was also great, and there was just the right amount of it, in relation to the more serious aspects. Brennan's sincere thoughts to better plan her next act of spontaneity and also Booth asking her if this was a carjacking (as well as her earnest response to that question) were perfect examples of your spot-on (and in character) wit in this story.
So, anyway, I'll stop rambling here and just wind this up by applauding your keen insights and wonderful writing. Great job! :-)
| KEHC chapter 1 . 2/28/2010
I just re-read this for the umpteenth time. I absolutely love it. You are a wonderful writer and you get inside a character's head beautifully. I would buy anything you wrote.
| Rosie-not-Rose chapter 1 . 2/21/2010
GUH. I'm really really glad I've come across your writing. This is the first one I've read of yours and already I'm very impressed!
I do feel that the issues in this episode perhaps weren't dealt with as appropriately as they should be, and this was really satisfying to read.
And that ending! I had goosebumps. XD
| cal40241 chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
i really like this! it's so brennon, and i like the fact that she tries to do something nice for him, and it turns out differently than she would have expected, but it still means something. very real.
| 2BBornot2BB chapter 1 . 1/27/2010
I hope you got a beta (everyone needs one!) but if this is you rambling, please don't stop :) Really lovely. Thanks for sharing.
| blaineanderson chapter 1 . 4/4/2009
"Booth reaches, cutting her off with the soft brush of his fingertips on her cheek. She flinches but his hand doesn’t drop away. He holds her like this, his fingers gentle blurs against the darkness. He smiles warmly at her."
*sigh*. Oh, I already loved this episode. But this fic? Gosh. I think its gonna make me love the episode even more. Especially considering everytime I watch it from now on, I'll be imagining that this entire thing occurs off camera.
And can I just say. I love the “How did I turn out?” little bit. Just lovely :).
| csimesser1 chapter 1 . 3/16/2009
that was great loved it
| stellalux24 chapter 1 . 3/10/2009
This is really good! They are completely in character-good job!
| TemperTemper chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
Oh gosh this is completely gorgeous too - guh! I'm in heaven :)
I love this: *his fingers gentle blurs against the darkness*
Beautiful. You have such a mature writing style. I wish I could write like you when I was 19. Just fab :)
| gilmorefanforever chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
Okay, because I liked the first story of yours I read, I obviously had to read all the other ones. I think this one is my favorite. I mean, I'm completely obsessed with Con Man in the Meth Lab fics (weird, I know) and this one was one of the best I've read. Great work!
| Shayna Maidel chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
Aw, that's cute. A nice blend of angst and fluffiness. I like your last description of "gentle blurs". It really fit the tone of the story.
Would you please maybe PM me if you figure out how to get a beta and let me know how? I don't know either. Thank you!
| fishyfin1 chapter 1 . 12/29/2008
i loved your ramblings... bones sweetness and especially the intensity of Booth brushing her cheek... glad it didnt end in a kiss!
| torzi-bom chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
*sigh* loves it! as if YOU need a beta! you have the characters down a lot better than most of the authors around these parts. they're a tricky bunch, but you seem to be able to do it naturally, no beta included. lucky duck! ah i love me some hearty BB moments. that was some golden stuff.
| Turbs chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
very nice story! :) they are so cute together!
| bluhr chapter 1 . 12/17/2008
Hmmh, much better than most Bones fanfiction I've read so far (though I must admit I haven't been reading it for long). Usually it's all badly portrayed characters and no apparent knowledge of the English language.
I think you have a good grasp of the characters and, honestly, you're one of the few people on this site who don't seem to actually need a beta.
I'm not sure, but the best way to find a beta is probably just to ask, like you did, at the end of your story. You could also ask around in the communties on this website, you'l certainly find people ready to help you out.