ah, i missed this fic. shikamaru is awesome!

AWESOME STORY, it is awesome what your doing im so glad this story is here and i am a full supporter. but i want to know about jiraya and stuff because the rasengan is naruto. its like shadow clones, he has to have it. and jiraya has always been narutos father figure. always. not to menton jiraya is one of the best characters ever. it could go well with the group.

Nice update.

I was just wondering though about the Gaara/Naruto situation (If I remember correctly, the Valley of the End battle didn't occur yet); did Naruto have that whole pep-talk with him? Because it seems to me that Gaara and his siblings are still pretty much hostile, despite that they felt grateful to Naruto (especially Gaara, to the point of coming down to help retrieve Sasuke). Temari seems to take more note of Naruto, if those meaningful looks sometimes seem mean anything. But still, Gaara. Gaara smiling. Gaara...still sadistic? Or just a misinterpretation on Naruto's part? Because I thought by then that Naruto considered Gaara an ally/comrade/friend despite some fear (which is mostly gets rid of between the fight).

Well apart from that, I like your story as usual; I think you deserve way more reviews and people to read it, 'cause it's clever and realistic.

Good job. :)

Wasup. Good Things- i really love how you turned a relatively minor char into a key character definitely worth respecting. Shika is a total baddass, and takes pretty much everyone to school. The reverse Chakra is also something interesting.

Bad Things- Unfortunately, get this feeling that Shika's intelligence is becoming a bit of a deux ex machina as it seemingly has no downsides. Extremely high intelligence can be as much of a curse as a boon, in the sense that it leads to motivation issues, weak social skills and frustration because of a cohort who cannot comprehend ideas presented by said genius. Shika very barely exhibits any of these flaws (limited motivation) and has already surpassed it. What use then is Naruto, the still Juvenile, mentally stagnant character. He in the manga is supposedly to bring extreme empathetic skills (which to kishi is another deux ex machina) but for some reason cannot deduce diddlyshit except in the heat of battle. This has changed little from the beginning of your story, and this stagnation irks me as it allows the amazing character of Shika to minimalize Naruto.

Now that was not at all meant to bash your kickass work into the dust. I just think you need to mold Naruto into a leader, allowing his abilty to empathize with others more influential and prominent. For god sakes though, turn up the common sense and strategic thinking. Naruto's one dimensionality in the manga stems form hulis lack to think unless they are at the climax of the arc. To make sure that this does not happen here, push into a less juevenile role and a more suave, clever one(best to show in more clear, charming diction). Think of him being the underhanded trickster/trapmaker he iswhen you write, like a robin hood. Then turn down shika's overwhelming genius. Give him that frustrating - to talk-to, Gregory House -esque (from the tv show house) attitude (not to the douchebaggery of hous himself but a bit better). A greater level of maturity and cleverness in Naruto and a lower llevel of overwhelming brilliance will help establish a better dynamic btw them ( merlin-arthur/ Lenin-trotsky). This is just my opinion

Ralor

Nice. Your a sadist you know that for putting those 4 in that position.

NOW THATS WHAT I CALL A MEETING HEHE one big fight between ninja

Good story but wind Chidori. Variaition of Chidori.. really... why not make own jutsu instead of basing it off something. LIke a weapon base, a breathing base, something like that. We don't need hand held techniques all the time. We can do anything we want. Branch out on the originality and become creative with coming up with techniques. Story is solid as always so no worries there. But it is a bit slow and confusing where we are without description of area.

LMAO... and right after she told the kiddies off too XD lmao... oh man... great job and plz plz plzzzzzzzzzzz update soon

poor Shikamaru he forever stuck with troublesome women, well at least he has Naruto to be his scapegoat I mean friend. Great job keep up the good work.

YATTA! A new chapter!

I wonder who this other person is. By the way, great fight. Your doing really well for not having a Beta. Also another great chapter

RamenNight

Team Oblivion Shino. *o* Can't WAIT to read their teamwork! And love the relationships between Kakashi, Asuma, and Shikamaru. Chouji kicks so much ass, and OMG, Sakura and Sasuke are annoying. ;D

interesting, you did a great job of making the story believable so far, can't wait for update

Setting the mission up to fail, indeed.

I found this fic through a recc thread as SB and it took a while to get to it. Glad I did, though. I think I'll tag it for future updates and a Fav as well.

The story is very linear, but organized and presented in just the right way that you don't ever look for deeper side stories of subplots. In fact, I like the pacing for the most part. This is a good, solid fanfic that covers the bases very well.

Aww! I'm so happy I found this story! It's amazing...

I'm really looking forward to ur next chapter :)

See ya

Sorry its 'did' not 'do' for the last review.