Reviews for Fateful Defender
Angel Peach Blossom chapter 2 . 7/30/2011
Hm... well, I think this story was a bit too short for my liking.

I liked the idea of an added person and changing things around a bit. I didn't mind that at all, and thought it was a fresh change of pace.

The problem I had, however, was the pace itself. Now, you did give a lot of detail and spots, and I give you lots of credit of that! However, everything else goes by rather quickly. The fact this story was concluded in two chapters feels rather short, even though both chapters were longer than most chapters I've read.

I would have liked to see a lot more interaction with the world around the devil, and Jennifer. Instead, all you did was describe things, and only interact when needed. I felt very detached and felt there was a bit too much detail.

Now, I did think this idea is rather unique! The fact we have an actual... demon as it were helping to protect Jennifer was an interesting touch! It isn't something you see, so I give you props for being unique.

Spelling and grammar were not bad unless I missed anything. And that is always a plus trust me!

It was an interesting idea, I just would have liked to see a bit more.