|Reviews for Take a message?|
| stormgurl101 chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
this... u know I knew someone would honestly write a story about what cyclonis would do and you captured every elegant detail so amazingly like wow... I'm most impressed
| ighttior chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
amazing! done beautifully and quite realistically!
| Hermonthis chapter 1 . 12/14/2008
This is actually quite good, I thought you had Cyclonis's characterization down well, and I could tell DA was still reeling from that power trip with all those exclamation marks.
However, I do have some complaints. Personally I prefer longer chapters over multiple lines of single sentences, but that's an objective opinion. There were also some grammatical errors ('deciet' 'deceit') and the run-on sentences hurt my eyes. I would suggest taking another look at your paragraphs since some of them are just one long phrase, and break them up into smaller segments for better clarity.
| Flame Soldier chapter 1 . 12/13/2008
Wow, this was great! They were both perfectly in character. I could see this happening in the show! :D