|Reviews for His burden|
| reivers chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
Nice. A little bit of problems with punctuation, but other than that, really nicely written. One part that's gotten me nit-picky, however.
"Davros said he did, that he took ordinary humans and fashioned them into weapons as his enemy had so eloquently put it."
I really think this should be two sentences. It seems a bit redundant stating that Davros said it twice. Try "Davros said he did, that he took ordinary humans and fashioned them into weapons. His enemy had put it so eloquently."
I really enjoyed this, though. It effectively shows the Doctor's insecurities as they deal with his companions.