|Reviews for In My Power|
| Kageyjay chapter 21 . 10/12/2013
I enjoyed your story very much. You have great insight into some of the things that might have molded them, individually, and together as a family. Here, and there, throughought the story, you have written some truly beautiful words, thoughts and phrases, even whole paragraphs.
As far as Carlisle goes, I don't think it's really up to Stephenie. I think Esme would have a lot to say about your feelings for her husband!
| catjumped1 chapter 21 . 6/6/2013
I found this story while surfing this site. I found it to be well written and very enjoyable. I don't know if you are still writing or not but I'm going to check out your profile.
| alexiana75 chapter 1 . 1/28/2013
amazing and wonderfull, I love Carlisle and I was wonder myself about his toughts. Thank you, for this amazing idea!
| JessicaErinCullen chapter 21 . 12/28/2012
So, i'll admit, I reall don't review on FF as much as I really should . But I kinda feel like I NEED to review your story . I normally don't stray much from the normal Bella/Edward POV but I just couldn't not read this . I read it in one afternoon and it is quite possibly one of the best FF's i've read . Its so articulate and real, even though its about mythical creatures, and you actually write about the struggles that they would all have that wern't covered in the books . Especially the Edward/Esme part . Wow, this is the longest review i've ever done so i'll stop now but I will def be reading the sequel and some of your other stories :)
| CoffeeHouseDreams chapter 15 . 9/25/2012
Sweet! Edward is a little...moody. I'm not sure if that's so much like him...epic story!
| CoffeeHouseDreams chapter 11 . 9/24/2012
Rock on! 'Dis is excellent!
| CoffeeHouseDreams chapter 9 . 9/24/2012
Wonderful! Exactly as how Stephanie Meyer would write it. I think that Carlisle is very similar to Edward in this story. But much more wise.
| Thing in the fridge chapter 21 . 7/5/2012
I’ve found great satisfaction from reading this story: I have to confess a weakness for ideas that explore “offstage moments” in a familiar tale.
“In My Power” adds richness and excitement to the original books without distorting their plot or characters.
Your style for Carlisle's narration and dialogue is perfect. Your sympathy for his character shows!
Without giving away spoilers for other readers, there are also many insightful touches scattered throughout your story. Below are some of my favourites. I know that when I read it again, I’ll find others...!
Imagery: Carlisle as the ‘wolf whose sheepskin was now almost his own’.
Your light touch regarding historical accuracy: aspirin used against the 1918 influenza (ineffectually, as we now know).
Emmett's experiences during his transformation and as a newborn.
Personally, I would have liked your beta to have been more severe with her editing at times. It’s hard for a writer to ‘murder her darlings’ but sometimes a sentence needs unloading of a few adjectives!
One example which I mentally edited while reading was:
“I willed my inveterate body to move, but my mind was still in an obscure fog, the sweet, delicious smell of the alluring creature beneath me making my limbs feel heavy and sluggish.”
“I willed my body to move but my mind was still in a fog, my limbs made heavy by the delicious scent of the creature beneath me.”
It’s a slight niggle, however, and it doesn’t detract from the story.
My last round of applause goes to your depiction of these characters that we all know so well is handled really well. I like their own voices (very true to themselves) and also their analysis of each other.
For instance: Carlisle's bitterly self-mocking view of himself as ‘the mighty vampire, growling impotently at death’ and his perceptive assessment of Edward’s ‘propensity to run from difficulty’. *Hah! Yes, tell us about it!*
I also thoroughly enjoyed the clashes between the principal characters. Edward and Rosalie’s mutual loathing and sibling-squabbling is particularly good, nailed with such perfect glee.
Thanks from just one of your happy readers:
the Thing in the fridge.
| my-thyme chapter 21 . 4/30/2012
Beautiful! Your writing haunts me. I found myself reading sooooo slowly, savoring every paragraph - no reading until 2AM for this story, each chapter had to be slowing thought through. Thank You! Once I read Alice and Jasper's story, I'm going back to Meyers' site to re-read Midnight Sun, THAT'S the natural progression I see to this...
| Guest chapter 12 . 11/23/2011
You've made Edward such an annoying jerk in this story.
| tawniemarie chapter 11 . 11/13/2011
stumbled on to your story and I love it...I feel like I found the prequel, you are very talented. I really love pre-twilight canon fics, but it's hard to fnd really good ones that keep my interest, hope you write tons more, and thanks so much for what you've already put out there!
| Conn JS1 chapter 1 . 10/14/2011
Wow-beautiful!I love that you take it slow,and how close to vampire-edward,but still human he is!thanks so much for sharing!
| Julie chapter 21 . 9/22/2011
I must admit that I thought I lost my love for these books a few years ago, but for some strange reason I was in the mood to read some Twilight fanfiction. I find it incredibly hard to find really good quality fanfiction but I am so grateful for having stumbled upon yours. I loved this, it was brilliantly written and you have such a talent for creating characters and emotion. Keep it up.
| Anonymous chapter 11 . 8/21/2011
It's a fun read but I am totally not d'accord with Carlisle killing someone! Haha, I mean seriously, a little AU don't ya think? Esme seems to be pretty sneaky too...
| JosieFinyx chapter 21 . 7/4/2011
Just perfect! You dedication to grammer and medical facts really paid off. Beautiful from start to end!