Reviews for Grand Theft Auto: The Mole
parry chapter 2 . 3/20/2004
I have to agree with some of the other reviewers. The story is just like a strategy guide. You're not putting any voice into your story. It's very dull and the story seems to "rushed". And...uh, why did this guy ask Trish to marry him? That was a little...er, what's the word? Drastic? Extreme? Oh well, I can't find the word right now. Anyway, you need to put some voice into your story and make it a little more action packed. You shoot him in the head. Fabulous. Great. Fan-fuckin-tastic. Now what? You collect your reward and all that fun stuff. Put some more conflict in your story. It's okay and all, but I've seen better.
Jedi James chapter 1 . 1/12/2004
cool keep on writing
PZYKO chapter 1 . 10/14/2002
I have a saying: when you don't like things "Fuck the Bullshit." The hell with the flamers. It's good. Just change the "you" to an "I"; make it a first person view story.
Skater Dude 2002 chapter 2 . 6/4/2002
Several questions...

1) Don't you mean Luigi not Louie?

2) Tony is a mafia mambers name, you could have at least come up with something different couldn't you?

This actually wasn't very goes the main characters way, and it starts to sound like a 'Mary-Sue'

4/10

S D 2002
Inui chapter 1 . 6/1/2002
Its...okay. Way to short though.
Joshua S chapter 2 . 5/28/2002
So quick,yet a waste of my fucking time.
with a smile on our lips chapter 2 . 1/11/2002
nice. write more
Cereburus chapter 1 . 12/25/2001
Sorry for not continuing the story for so long. The story is NOT dead. The next chapter is LOOONNNGGG.
Belle Of The Cell I'm Gone chapter 1 . 12/4/2001
I've just realised that Gangsters Paridise is the first fic ever published on this GTA section! If you dont believe, sort our stories by publish date (see top of screen). I thought you'd all just like to see! Just a hint of pride here! Anyways, sorry to use up this review slot to tell you this. Just wanted to write summat! I NEED TO WRITE AND RECIEVE NEW REVIEWS! HINT HINT! Respect. L B xxx
Sapphire Rose not logged in chapter 1 . 11/28/2001
AWESOME! and the guy's name is Luigi, not Louie. Anyway, I hope for more!
Belle Of The Cell I'm Gone chapter 2 . 11/28/2001
Hmmm, good going...but does it have to be so quick? Can we taste the action? I know this is meant to be like a mission log, but it would be so much more captivatin' if you described feeling and atmosphere...blah blah u get idea oh boy I'm babbling! Sorry! Apart from my meaness (dont take it to heart) this is great grounds for a fic! (Read my fic and see what u think, please please!)

L B xxx

ps I do like your fic, just my views on how to make it better!
Anonymous4642 chapter 2 . 11/28/2001
See, this is looking better. More like a story. Oh yeah, welcome to
Cereburus chapter 1 . 11/27/2001
I'm the author of this. Just to let you all know I added the second chapter
Anonymous4642 chapter 1 . 11/27/2001
Okay, good story except for 2 things.

1. Too Short

2. To much like a Strategy guide.

Other than that I like your story
Joseph Edward Logue chapter 1 . 11/27/2001
Very original concept, making up a mission for the game. If it had more depth it would have been better but its good,Layta Mako.