Reviews for Inter Vivos |
---|
![]() ![]() ![]() My kingdom this ending Harry happy, Severus alife and happy, QwQ TTwTT and the D Will pay JOJOJOJOJOJO Loved it Tks 4 sharing TT0TT jwj |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a beautiful story so far. I like how you faintly use canon to progress but everything in between is a story on its own. Snape is deliciously complex and Sirius isn't reduced to a Hero or a man child but shown as the broken individual he is. Thank you. |
![]() ![]() This was really really good and I absolutely loved that last chapter of fluff. What a perfect ending! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What? You really burned the cloak? :o Sacrilege! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful story. I’m so happy that for was the relationships and sex was realistic, filled with mistakes and laughter, distrust and ptsd. It is definitely worth the read. Thank you for writing it. |
![]() ![]() Amazing. Shocking story from bit too bit, but amazing and well dobe |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry basically gave him a free pass to destroy his things and is pretty much doing nothing about it, I wouldn't give a damn why he did it. Fair is fair regardless if they are morally right by othersby their standard), harry is pretty much being a push over about this. HOPEFUL this changes. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for the read! |
![]() ![]() Okay. I really enjoy your story itself. But I think you deserve some honesty. Only the best writers do. It will better you. 1. There is SO much that you could and should cut out in order to speed things up. It takes an unnecessarily long amount of time to wade through the narration. Instead of telling us exactly what each character is thinking - SHOW us! And actually - you already do, brilliantly! But then you also precede or follow it with a detailed explanation of what the character is thinking. Leave that up to the reader to discern based off of characters’ subtleties and the description of their body language. Leave that, and delete the in-your-face explanations. We can figure it out, and your chapters will get MUCH shorter. It’s just a bit exhausting and tedious to see and then read a character’s emotions twice or three times over. 2. Please, please, please make some type of break when switching between each characters’ turn and between scenes. I get so bogged down in the narrative from #1 that I just start skimming to pick up the drama and main chatter points, that I get completely confused when suddenly we’ve switched from Harry’s perspective to Draco’s. Again, you have a wonderful story going here. It has just been one of the most tiring to read through! You are an excellent storyteller, you’ve just got to tweak and cut for the sake of readers’ enjoyment. It will make you an even better author one day. Thank you for sharing this beautiful story with us! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful! |
![]() ![]() I've been reading all your work starting backwards and moving forwards just incredible writing world building and imagination so privileged that you share it ️ |
![]() ![]() This story was beautiful. I didn't like it at first because I thought Severus was just so manipulative and cruel, using Harry's grief against him but I like how their relationship evolved and I loved the Drarry relationship too. I like how Harry is realistically distrustful of adults, I mean it's not like he had any reason to trust Snape (Or literally any adult ever). I love this ending and I love that you didn't excuse Dumbledore as some authors tend to do. |
![]() ![]() ![]() it's absurd. who is he, a verita-man? like he always tells the truth! he lies if necessary and why he's always pissed off when the others do the same? |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really can't understand. i mean, he lies to people and he keeps the truth-like the fact abiut dursleys-and he expects them to tell the whole truth? |
![]() ![]() ![]() the very behavior he shows about infirmary reminds me a big baby throwing a tantrum. |