Reviews for Paper Moon
Lupin4Tonks chapter 25 . 9/21/2011
I love it. I really, really love it. I love that it had E/J and that you ended with B/A. I thought that secret had something to do with a pregnancy. I love this line:

Alice didn't want anyone aside from the boys to know about me being pregnant before the wedding date, which made me laugh incessantly. It wasn't like we could get accidentally pregnant.

Hilarious :D
B3.500 chapter 25 . 9/20/2011
This was my first venture into fem slash. Thanks for making it great. Can't wait for TTH sequel!
odiejae chapter 25 . 9/19/2011
wow, i never expected bella would be the one to get pregnant! even when i was reading that they needed edward's good swimmers, i kept thinking that edward can't donate to alice. hopefully this is my only *duh* moment of the week! anyway, i'm so glad bella will get to experience carrying a child also. and what a lovely gift to alice, the necklace with their birthstones. i loved this chapter and am sad to see them go but i am so thrilled that yes mistress is back. i LOVE that story! can't wait!
MoCullen chapter 7 . 9/19/2011
Mmm, naptime indeed! I love seeing Jasper & Edward together:)

Poor Bella, having to live with the guilt of what happened so long ago. Jasper went into it knowing that she liked girls. . It wasn't really her fault.
MoCullen chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
Edward is so sweet!
MoCullen chapter 5 . 9/19/2011
Oh no, Jasper is in love with Bella? Well this complicates things. Poor Jasper seeing in Bella's eyes the love he had hoped for all these years, but for Alice.
chikodomo chapter 25 . 9/18/2011
Thank you for this great story. It's a great ending.

So thanks for sharing this.

MoCullen chapter 4 . 9/18/2011
I love the relationship between Jasper and Bella. He is such a sweet and caring friend. Bella is a lucky girl.
FarDareisMai2 chapter 25 . 9/18/2011
*sigh* That was a perfect ending. Of course it had to end with Bella and Alice. It wouldn't be right otherwise. I love the happy ending they all got, and I'm a little teary now that the story is over. Thanks for getting back to it and finishing it up.
twisludwig chapter 25 . 9/15/2011
okay, I am finally reviewing your story, you will soon understand why I do not write because I doubt much of this review will make sense. So I will start out by saying I love this story and every time I drive by the Paper Moon I think of you and of Bella and Alice dancing there, and of Jasper and Edward being dragged their by their sister/best friends. And this always makes me smile.

So the things I love about this story are:

It was HOT, sweet and HOT

That all the characters are adults who have some sense of who they are, yes meeting the loves of their lives changes them to some degree but they know who they are

Alice is not super flighty, flitting around, dancing with her scarf to stevie nicks. This drives me nuts and I was very glad that your Alice was not the fic stereotype

Alice left first, so Bella had to be the one to realize that she was special and to figure out how to find her and tell her

I liked that yes, both Jasper and Bella had some moments of panic about what it meant for their relationship that they were having relationships with other people, but was not some big long drawn out thing, and that the people who loved them realized how important to each they are and luckily the people there were in relationships with were family

They all had baggage, but they actually all handled it like adults, no storming out when secrets were confessed, no making Alice feel like shit for having a baby and giving him up for adoption.

They all had real lives and did not get to see each other all the time, they were busy people and had to forge their relationships like people do it the real world

I love Jasper's rant in chapter 16 about " the fucking redheaded step-child of the community. People look down on me from both sides" The reality in that was great(well at least what I imagine to be the reality of it)

Though Esme and Carlisle may have struggled with it in the past they really came to accept their children and their chosen mates. There is nothing better than a great mom hug

Jasper's guilt and trauma were dealt with responsibly, though he did go on a short bender, he actually sought out professional helper, no magic cock to fix him thank goodness

Carpet picnic, I totally thought it was going to be something much dirtier knowing those two ladies, but it was very cute and sweet

I love that the boys were the men of honor/best men

I totally caught the do you think they noticed and was waiting for the next weeks update, I thought either the boys got married or someone was pregnant

Edwards reflection of looking at his family both born to and chosen was beautiful and having him and Jasper and their forever was a perfect ending for them

Loved both of Bella's proposals and the fact that she would not show Esme the ring before Alice got to see it

Bella and Alice dancing and Alice talking about all the wonderful times they were going to have with their baby brought a tear to my eye

I was glad that Emmett and Rose were able to get past the hooker comments and his bitterness from his previous relationship to build something for themselves together

And I think that my absolute favorite part was this right here

we exchanged one last look before he opened them and we walked through.

"Thank you for this," I whispered to him as we walked.

Jasper's voice was strained, his voice tight with emotion. "Thank you for the honor."

Thanks for writing, thanks for letting me and everyone else read and I am looking forward to all your other stories

AscotBella chapter 25 . 9/15/2011
I confess that I'm not a huge fan of fem slash either, but this story was NOT about the sexy times, but of the love and connection two people have. THANK YOU! It really is a fabulous piece of work-easy to read, great flow, and completely lovable characters. Well done.

It was always exciting, always loving, totally romantic!

Can't wait for the next story!
BLilTXgirl chapter 25 . 9/15/2011
*sobs* I can't believe it's over!

And I was right. This was a perfect ending and you wrapped up everything I was wondering about. And I was right about the pregnancy in my last review. Go me!

Bring on YM! *assumes the position* ;)
Remmykins1901 chapter 25 . 9/14/2011
What? it's over! Awww.. I was hoping to see Alice and Bella's Honeymoon. and yes.. I squeaked..not only did I squeak at the gorgeous and absolutely Romantic Carpet Picnic.. which by the way I totally thought was something entirely different.. but she PROPOSED! I love how Alice was all like.. sure.. why not. but when found out Bella wasn't kidding.. the look on her face must have been priceless. The ring was so beautiful.. I wonder what color it was?

they are having a baby! did Edward have sex with Bella? because that's what I was thinking but then I went wait.. would either of them allow that? then I thought could they just taken Edward's sperm and have Bella implanted with it.. I'm still not sure which is right?

Omg the coupons.. they were so sweet and the watch I wonder what the engraving said? the birthstone necklace with all the stones of each of them. that's so sweet. I'm going to miss these guys so very much. Bella dress was so stunning.. and Alice, all the time she spent with Esme working on that amazingly beautiful dress. I wish I could seen them.. So happy.

When I read the A/N I saw.. TTH.. I looked at it and it seemed familar but I couldn't place it. So I kept looking.. and finally I caught it, It's The Trip Home! I miss those guys! I wonder how Edward is doing? did he get his matches? how's Jasper? how his soccer team? How's Bella?
BLilTXgirl chapter 25 . 9/14/2011
*sobs* I can't believe it's over!

And I was right. This was a perfect ending and you wrapped up everything I was wondering about. And I was right about the pregnancy in my last review. Go me!

Bring on YM! *assumes the position* ;)
Kimberley Ball chapter 25 . 9/14/2011
Sniff, sniff. Its all done :(

On a positive note though, I love that they are so happy in the end. Bella has come on such an long emotional journey. I cannot believe that she ended up married and now expecting! Who knew! LOL

I am sad that its done but I have loved the journey and am happy to see the happy place that they now find themselves in.
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