Reviews for Grandpa Clock: Time
zheliel chapter 1 . 2/1/2009
Great content.

Great Shape *Oh!*

Great Voabulary.

Great Grammar.

By the way, what lvl must u be so thatu won't die in the land of time (Maple)?
Milloniare chapter 1 . 1/13/2009
k that was good but i can't judge it since it said in the rules K-K and this is T
Absol Master chapter 1 . 12/26/2008
LOL summary!

This is a great poem. Just a little too mechanical-maybe that's because you had to try to keep to the hourglass shape.

By the way, an hourglass only has 2 bulbs. Unless...

OH I GET IT! It's TWO hourglasses. Sigh...

MAN! The hourglass idea was originally mine...but since I didn't tell anyone, it's not counted. I was thinking of writing a fanfic about Alishar with "hourglass" in the title...

Yep, I think this was good. The meaning, at least. You used the words "time" and "clock" a little too much, to be honest. Some of them could have been removed.

This is the first shape poem I've seen. Was thinking of doing one, but I thought it would be too much trouble. Honestly, now, that is a REALLY nice shape. How did you make the curves so smooth? However, I would have to say that the necks are too thin and long. Too many "I"s.

Yep, I'm looking forward to more poems from you. It appears you have a really wide vocabulary; it's just that I don't see that a lot in your rhyming poems-because they're a little restrictive?

Well, better than the stuff I write!

P.S. Could you read Never Give In (which I wrote)? I think it's my best poem.

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