Reviews for My Sister Rosalie, Book I: Captor
You'reBeautifulDontDeny chapter 1 . 4/27
Wrosty chapter 92 . 3/13
Thank you for that story. Normally i don't read stories with first persons pov etc. But some other stories change my mind about it and i give it a shot too. And im not regretting it. İ didn't understand the first chapters,but then i started to like it. The way you describe your characters,the way you write,and didn't skip the progress they making into their personalities.İn some fanfictions,people just write Rosalie as heartless demon. And they write Bella either too bold,or too shy and awkward. And they can do that, but they skip the parts how she made this progress in herself and it cause me to dislike the you didn't do that. İ also like the humor you put. Which is Bella's inner talk. Bella is smart and we know it from the series, she is Charlie's daughter after all. İt showed in this story. You have a real talent and a real patience for writing 92 chapter ! İ would be too lazy. Anyway,im waiting more of your stories.i wish you continued success?

Detective Prince Bluebottle chapter 1 . 11/3/2017
what the fuck
Anonymous chapter 1 . 10/30/2017
YES! I remember reading this story what feels like forever ago. But then life happened, and I stopped reading for a time, losing bookmarks and forgetting titles of awesome works.

But now, I've found this amazing story. AND it's completed?! I'm so hyped!

Thank you so much for this beautiful work. I can't wait to read through and fall in love with it all over again. You are an amazing writer, and I definitely plan on checking out your other stories whenever I have the time :)
avalynnelfe chapter 92 . 4/10/2017
and, I'm finished. you know what a journey it has been for me, and I can't thank you enough for writing this story! yes, it has taken me a lot longer than it usually would to get through this, but that is more a testament of how good your writing is than anything else. it has been hard, and there have been several instances in which I didn't know if I could go on, but Bella could, and if she can then so can I! it has been a story that has taught me so much, that has made me think and question myself and my actions, and I felt every second of everything Bella has been through. and even now, it is not the end. I will first read the story from Rosalie's perspective, for one because you recommended it and also because I desperately want to get a little more insight into how her brain works, and then, I will gladly be moving on to what there is of the second part of this one big, epic story. I don't even know what else to say, except for another heartfelt THANK YOU. and like I said, it doesn't matter if you don't write another single word in your whole life. with this story you have given me something nobody else has and it is something that I treasure so so much. I don't know how to describe it, but please just know that.
avalynnelfe chapter 88 . 4/4/2017
I would have expected this chapter to turn out a lot worse from the summary at the beginning... I'm glad Rosalie didn't take advantage of Bella. I didn't think she would, she is abiding by her principles too strongly for that, and I do believe that somewhere deep down, whatever else she may try to convince herself of, she just cares about Bella and doesn't want to take this from her... I'm already fearing the next morning and whatever their conversation is going to end up as, but I'm holding out hope that it will be better that I expect it to be, even though it is, without doubt, still not going to be good...
Fish and Bird chapter 11 . 3/27/2017
The interplay of the two women when Bella first awoke was as captivating as it was lean.

A crime I often find fanfic guilty of - and here I do not exclude my own execrable scribblings - is that of excessive verbiage. Here you have crafted a dialogue which is believable and fresh and I look forward to seeing more of this Rosalie.
Fish and Bird chapter 2 . 3/20/2017
Wow! It's always (for me) a thrill when I read that first chapter of a new story and find it to be well written. It bodes well for the next chapter and tends to rob me of my sleep, unfortunately.

"If a thing be worth doing, do it well. Be it not..." et cetera

I look forward to the coming chapters.
avalynnelfe chapter 83 . 3/19/2017
let me just say that this development was pretty unexpected. now more than ever, I would absolutely love having a little more insight into what Rosalie is feeling and thinking because from Bella's perspective, I have to admit it is kind of confusing. also, I'm doubtful everything is just going to be peachy from now on. that didn't happen after the equals thing, and also, it just wouldn't fit with the overall story and characterization. there is just no way this is happily ever after. and honestly, I'm sort of glad, as that means the story goes on
avalynnelfe chapter 78 . 3/13/2017
okay, maybe it's just me, but I have a feeling that there is something SERIOUSLY wrong with Rosalie... just sayin'...
avalynnelfe chapter 73 . 3/9/2017
wow, just wow... talk about an overreaction! there would have been other, and BETTER ways to 'take care' of this. explain to Bella/Lizzie WHY you shouldn't tell someone to go fuck themselves a little more rationally, and more importantly, NON-VIOLENT. THANK YOU! but I'm also at a loss at how Bella/Lizzie (I really don't know what to call her...) can just, so shortly after having suffered this much, turn to the one who caused that lovingly. she must have been VERY emotionally distressed. or whatever else her reason, I just don't understand it... maybe because Rosalie is the only one there to potentially offer comfort after this whole episode and is the only one she can turn to, so maybe, MAYBE, I could see myself acting similarly, but not really, sorry...
avalynnelfe chapter 66 . 3/6/2017
and now, as I have finished this chapter, I'm wondering since when Rosalie had all of this planned. and, if it played out like she imagined it. I don't really think so, to be honest, as it usually NEVER works out like you planned it... these last few chapters have definitely turned this story around, but I can't help but wonder about the things to come... surely, it isn't exactly easy being Rosalie's sister...
avalynnelfe chapter 63 . 3/5/2017
okay, either Rosalie is a really, REALLY good actress, or I missed something. cause there is one thing I know for sure, Edward was not physically there.
avalynnelfe chapter 62 . 3/4/2017
just a little side note that I had to get off my chest: I don't know if I can trust this new equality... it's like Rosalie 'flipped' again, just in the opposite direction... let's see how long this will lastalso, I'm unsure if I will like the next chapter or not... I guess I will just have to see what Rosalie is up to now
avalynnelfe chapter 60 . 2/27/2017
please don't take this the wrong way, but do you know how exhausting it can be to read this story? I have to keep up with the conversation, with Bella's feelings, trying the impossible task of figuring out Rosalie, and forming my own opinions and theories as I'm going! honestly, I don't think Rosalie noticed the irony Bella did, she was probably too far gone to do so, but I would very much like to find out what she WAS thinking. on the other hand, I almost always would... she's just so complex... I get what she wants to do with Bella and her self confidence, but I don't see the reason for it, because I don't fully believe the whole 'I want you to go to heaven as I can't anymore' thing... and also, I don't think she always uses the right methods, especially because the way Bella thinks, it's more contra productive than anything else...
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