|Reviews for My Sister Rosalie, Book I: Captor|
| avalynnelfe chapter 92 . 4/10
and, I'm finished. you know what a journey it has been for me, and I can't thank you enough for writing this story! yes, it has taken me a lot longer than it usually would to get through this, but that is more a testament of how good your writing is than anything else. it has been hard, and there have been several instances in which I didn't know if I could go on, but Bella could, and if she can then so can I! it has been a story that has taught me so much, that has made me think and question myself and my actions, and I felt every second of everything Bella has been through. and even now, it is not the end. I will first read the story from Rosalie's perspective, for one because you recommended it and also because I desperately want to get a little more insight into how her brain works, and then, I will gladly be moving on to what there is of the second part of this one big, epic story. I don't even know what else to say, except for another heartfelt THANK YOU. and like I said, it doesn't matter if you don't write another single word in your whole life. with this story you have given me something nobody else has and it is something that I treasure so so much. I don't know how to describe it, but please just know that.
| avalynnelfe chapter 88 . 4/4
I would have expected this chapter to turn out a lot worse from the summary at the beginning... I'm glad Rosalie didn't take advantage of Bella. I didn't think she would, she is abiding by her principles too strongly for that, and I do believe that somewhere deep down, whatever else she may try to convince herself of, she just cares about Bella and doesn't want to take this from her... I'm already fearing the next morning and whatever their conversation is going to end up as, but I'm holding out hope that it will be better that I expect it to be, even though it is, without doubt, still not going to be good...
| Fish and Bird chapter 11 . 3/27
The interplay of the two women when Bella first awoke was as captivating as it was lean.
A crime I often find fanfic guilty of - and here I do not exclude my own execrable scribblings - is that of excessive verbiage. Here you have crafted a dialogue which is believable and fresh and I look forward to seeing more of this Rosalie.
| Fish and Bird chapter 2 . 3/20
Wow! It's always (for me) a thrill when I read that first chapter of a new story and find it to be well written. It bodes well for the next chapter and tends to rob me of my sleep, unfortunately.
"If a thing be worth doing, do it well. Be it not..." et cetera
I look forward to the coming chapters.
| avalynnelfe chapter 83 . 3/19
let me just say that this development was pretty unexpected. now more than ever, I would absolutely love having a little more insight into what Rosalie is feeling and thinking because from Bella's perspective, I have to admit it is kind of confusing. also, I'm doubtful everything is just going to be peachy from now on. that didn't happen after the equals thing, and also, it just wouldn't fit with the overall story and characterization. there is just no way this is happily ever after. and honestly, I'm sort of glad, as that means the story goes on
| avalynnelfe chapter 78 . 3/13
okay, maybe it's just me, but I have a feeling that there is something SERIOUSLY wrong with Rosalie... just sayin'...
| avalynnelfe chapter 73 . 3/9
wow, just wow... talk about an overreaction! there would have been other, and BETTER ways to 'take care' of this. explain to Bella/Lizzie WHY you shouldn't tell someone to go fuck themselves a little more rationally, and more importantly, NON-VIOLENT. THANK YOU! but I'm also at a loss at how Bella/Lizzie (I really don't know what to call her...) can just, so shortly after having suffered this much, turn to the one who caused that lovingly. she must have been VERY emotionally distressed. or whatever else her reason, I just don't understand it... maybe because Rosalie is the only one there to potentially offer comfort after this whole episode and is the only one she can turn to, so maybe, MAYBE, I could see myself acting similarly, but not really, sorry...
| avalynnelfe chapter 66 . 3/6
and now, as I have finished this chapter, I'm wondering since when Rosalie had all of this planned. and, if it played out like she imagined it. I don't really think so, to be honest, as it usually NEVER works out like you planned it... these last few chapters have definitely turned this story around, but I can't help but wonder about the things to come... surely, it isn't exactly easy being Rosalie's sister...
| avalynnelfe chapter 63 . 3/5
okay, either Rosalie is a really, REALLY good actress, or I missed something. cause there is one thing I know for sure, Edward was not physically there.
| avalynnelfe chapter 62 . 3/4
just a little side note that I had to get off my chest: I don't know if I can trust this new equality... it's like Rosalie 'flipped' again, just in the opposite direction... let's see how long this will lastalso, I'm unsure if I will like the next chapter or not... I guess I will just have to see what Rosalie is up to now
| avalynnelfe chapter 60 . 2/27
please don't take this the wrong way, but do you know how exhausting it can be to read this story? I have to keep up with the conversation, with Bella's feelings, trying the impossible task of figuring out Rosalie, and forming my own opinions and theories as I'm going! honestly, I don't think Rosalie noticed the irony Bella did, she was probably too far gone to do so, but I would very much like to find out what she WAS thinking. on the other hand, I almost always would... she's just so complex... I get what she wants to do with Bella and her self confidence, but I don't see the reason for it, because I don't fully believe the whole 'I want you to go to heaven as I can't anymore' thing... and also, I don't think she always uses the right methods, especially because the way Bella thinks, it's more contra productive than anything else...
| Grand Witch Alliance chapter 92 . 2/26
Part of why I like/don't like the story so much is the setting (both time and location). I have a problem with historical stories in that I can't relate as well. Like I've never used a chamberpot or an outhouse. On the other hand, I liked learning about what they had in the past, or what they did. I didn't know they had things like Listerine or terms like 'first base' for sex back then. I didn't know much about outhouses (and I still don't) but because of this story I know they exist now. I'm assuming you weren't taking liberties in your writing by messing with timelines except the one chapter you explicitly stated you were doing so.
As for the location, they're secluded. I don't remember ever reading another story as long as yours in which one or two characters are isolated for so long a story. I prefer stories with many character interactions. On the other hand, because these two are isolated, all of those shenanigans can happen.
Third point- this is actually something I just didn't like as much. It's certainly possible but I didn't find it as realistic. After all those things Rosalie was able to do, in the chapter titled 'Spatula' she was unable to identify that tool. She wasn't able to recognize another tool as well. The whisk I believe. Rosalie knows all those things she did to take care of Bella and all of those words she knew, but she's never encountered a spatula. Did rich people not eat eggs?
Finally, Lizzie/Bellla. I don't like stories that change the main character's name. This... really didn't fit into that category. Rosalie called Lizzie/Bella depending on how she was treating her. Lizzie was the sister, Bella was the girl she fell in love with, and I really appreciated that difference.
| avalynnelfe chapter 41 . 2/9
Here I was, happy about a happy chapter, and then...
| avalynnelfe chapter 40 . 2/7
I'm sorry if I'm progressing so slowly, but every day I manage to read more than 3-5 chapters is a day worthy of celebration. meaning, they are not that frequent at the moment. bit, on to the story. are you sure Bella isn't suffering from a form of Stockholm syndrome? I mean, yes, Rosalie is kind to her and does this ga she doesn't have to, but if she hadn't kidnapped Bella in the first place, all of that wouldn't even be necessary... also, while I don't think Bella is Lizzy, I do think Bella swan isn't all there is to her. also, that mirror thing really surprised me. I got that Bella wasn't the most confident person in the world (but then again, who would be in the presence of Rosalie Hale?) but at least the way the story is told she does seem a little more sure of herself. on the other hand, I'm glad she isn't just constantly pitying herself or something like that, cause that would get very exhausting to read very quickly. I think. well, whatever. however long it may take me, I will finish this story, just as I will be leaving the occasional review on the way.
| avalynnelfe chapter 22 . 2/4
so, in the last three days I at least got until here, even though I had literally no time. my weekend is packed as well, but I am finding the time to continue reading your wonderful story. there are no other words for it than perfect, or at least as close to perfect as one can get. it's intriguing, it's well written and you never know what is coming next. especially the way you write Rosalie is absolutely in character, consistent and confusing and understandable in one. I'm off to the next chapter then, bye