|Reviews for My Sister Rosalie, Book I: Captor|
| GothicPheonix chapter 40 . 10/24/2009
I defintely love this part here:
“Is ‘rule number one’ my concern?” I whispered this question carefully, looking at the ground in front of me.
“You are the demur one, aren’t you?” she asked in a lilting voice that betrayed something like surprise.
I risked a look at her. “You aren’t scolding me, are you?”
“Hm?” Her voice and her look were distant. “No. Scolding you? I was admiring you.”
My eyes widened in shock, and she looked away quickly as she explained herself.
“It’s just that people Back East are so much more direct. Is this a Midwest thing, the humility and shyness?”
She looked at me again and smirked.
I blushed, of course, and dropped my eyes again.
I don’t know if I can tell you what that sound was like: light and easy, relaxed, yet it was musical and enchanting at the same time. Mesmerizing. That’s what it was: her laughter was mesmerizing, and the way it mingled with her scent ... I wanted to keep hearing it. Forever.
But then she continued in a more serious tone. “Yes, ‘rule number one’ pertains to you. One could even go so far as to say it’s your only concern ... and mine. But that might be hyperbole.”
And the way she spoke her words, in those measured tones, and the words that she used, and ... well, if this what being a lady entailed — speaking that way and laughing that way and moving that way and ... being that way — then I’d better tell Rosalie to give up her project before it frustrated her. Well, before it frustrated her more.
“So ...” I added, helpfully. Maybe if I spoke less words, it’d raise her ire less often.
“So, what’s ‘rule number one,’ hm?” She asked for me, and I nodded in response.
“Let me ask you a question.” She turned to me as she said this. “What would you say if you were told that there were creatures that were impenetrable? That they appeared to fly? That they ‘lived’ forever? That they drank blood? What would you feel if you were told vampires were real, and you were presented with irrefutable evidence?”
I looked at her. Then I thought about it. “I guess ... I don’t know ... I guess it would make sense.” I shrugged.
Rosalie frowned. “You wouldn’t be jealous?” I shook my head. “You wouldn’t be afraid?” I looked down and shrugged at that.
“Why is that?” she asked quietly.
I knew the answer to that one. “Because I’ve seen you, and the ...” I paused as I remembered their names weren’t the Hales before I said their correct name, “... Cullens. Jealous? No, from what you’ve said it sounds ... hard.” I was going to say something like “terrible” but I didn’t want to hurt her feelings. “And afraid? Well, the Cullens seem nice, and you ...” I stopped because I didn’t know how to continue.
“Hm,” was her reply layered with thought. “Perhaps I was asking the wrong person, and perhaps your encounter with the only vampires that wouldn’t consume you and the ones you love as soon as they saw you has tainted your perspective. But can you think like every other person in the world for a moment?”
“What do you mean?” I asked her.
“Every other person would be terrified and would be envious. ‘Live’ forever? Monstrous strength and speed? Invulnerability? And on the opposite side of the coin: vampires? Real? Every person, once they became aware of that, would fear for their mortal lives, and rightly so. And in that fear they would band and they would march out into the world in a panicked mob, killing many innocents: ‘She’s a vampire!’ they would scream, and kill you for the paleness of your skin. But then they might find a way to destroy our kind. And that,” she ended with a very ominous tone, “cannot be allowed.”
“And that is ‘rule number one.’ For people do not act on things they do not contemplate or know. And if they do not know vampires exist, they will not act and learn and eventually destroy the indestructible things that we are. So any knowledge pointing to vampires must be destroyed, to keep the people ignorant and docile. And anybody who knows vampires exist, or has seen one as they are? Well, they must be ...” and she shrugged.
“Oh,” I said.
You put the characteristic of Bella in the movie and books here by showing how she doesn't care if Rosalie is a vampire and that she isn't afraid of them :) Well done Geophf; you are definitely one of my favorite (top 5) fanfic authors on here.
But this part:
Every person, once they became aware of that, would fear for their mortal lives, and rightly so. And in that fear they would band and they would march out into the world in a panicked mob, killing many innocents: ‘She’s a vampire!’ they would scream, and kill you for the paleness of your skin. But then they might find a way to destroy our kind. And that,” she ended with a very ominous tone, “cannot be allowed.”
is sadly true. Human nature; always hating or fearing what they cannot understand or because of their difference is terrible and still goes on today. :(
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 24 . 10/22/2009
Ah! So it is working! Here's your review!
So, Fan fic is having issues. It won't let me review, so I'll send it along this way, because I think its time to start the lemontree, right? But, I might wait, because it may interrupt my flow here. I haven't touch any other fanfic since I started so plotlines don't get confused. So, I'm falling behind on both updates and writing myself trying to have time to read. If fanfic won't let me review, I guess I'll be forced to move on.
Ok, so Bella is confusing me along with her. But I'm going to stick to my guns and say she totally wants a piece of Rose. I honestly didn't even consider this when I started reading everything. But you're making me wonder. Still, can you make me fall in love with Rose too? So far, you're doing a good job keeping Bella's emotions clear, though still not understanding the whole feeling, as I can't get past that she WAS kidnapped, even if the kidnapper saved her life a few times afterward. So, it makes me wonder...if it had been Edward whisking her away, would she be feeling the same things? I'd say yes. So does that mean she would fall in love with any of them, regardless of who it was, as long as it was a vampire. Like she was destined to fall in love with the first vamp she spends ltime with? Or, is it just something with Bella? I just don't know...
K, Made up my mind. I'm continuing with MSR. Oh, and the name of the best reviewer ever...refolin. Expect her. She asked today if she should read this fic or Fallout first, and even though I totally love OCD's awesomesauce, I told her to start here. Doesn't always work, but she's eventually read everything I've rec'd.
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 23 . 10/21/2009
So, I getting mixed signals from Bella...first, I think she wants Rosie...then, she offers to hook her up...your A/N cleared it up a bit, but I'm still trying to figure out Bella's feelings...
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 22 . 10/20/2009
Hm...so this one is interesting. If her dreams are foreshadowing, I feel like we are in for a ride...That has to be Edward, right? Oh! I'm excited to see this all play out. I didn't realize she was feeling that way about the situation...
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 21 . 10/20/2009
Now this chapter is much stronger. I felt more intune with what was going on in Bella's head, and came to the conclusion that I just don't like the way Bella is accepting being kidnapped by a vampire. I don't know, but I have a hard time with the thank yous when its Rosie's fault in the first place. That being said, even though she says pretty much nothing and is a kidnapper, I like Rosalie a lot more than normal.
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 20 . 10/20/2009
Again, there's not much to comment, only I hope she eats her now.
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 19 . 10/20/2009
Rescue Rosie, what I tell you? I find her irritating too.
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 18 . 10/20/2009
I have a feeling its going to be Rosie to the rescue...Also, you seem rather unconcerned in your speak of womens monthly friend...very unmanly...just so you know.
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 17 . 10/20/2009
Hmm...wondering about Rosalie's reaction. Does just the thought of blood make her nearly snap, or is it something else? And the dreams seem rather intuitive, even for Bella.
Oh, and I also wanted to tell you that after thinking it over, I decided that you're right about being cannon Edward. He was pretty light hearted and easy going until he fully realized the risk he was putting on Bella. I imagine in MSR Universe, he's the same moody broody man I know and love...
Thanks, this is great!
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 16 . 10/20/2009
Yes, I am still out here. I just took a much needed break from twific to catch up on another series I love to hate...Anywho, I like this chapter. Rosalie comes out both hurt and affected by Bella's ignorance. She lays out all her insecurities. Very nice. On to more...
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 15 . 10/18/2009
Work on her aim...you make me laugh...
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 14 . 10/18/2009
So, I sense a bit of Stockholm syndrome already. But Bella's dropped the V-bomb. What next?
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 13 . 10/18/2009
So, this was very good. I like Charlie's experience. It fits well with what a vet might have said. Makes me feel even more for him...But Bella's got her period. Uh oh...
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 12 . 10/18/2009
Its funny that Rosalie would get pissed for Bella to find herself in the exact situation she'd warned. Oh, well. Great action!
| EclipsedbyJacob chapter 11 . 10/18/2009
So, I think Rosalie assumes Bella knows what they are, which she doesn't. Even with the horse eating incident. I get the feeling Rose is changing Bella...very interesting...