Reviews for The Flowering Haze
Guest chapter 1 . 6/2/2016
Really good story. Well written. Captures moments really well without going into long-winded explanations.

Love it.
SomebodyLost chapter 1 . 3/22/2016
The only thing that failed here is the pregnancy, not the story. It was a good story, even if it was bittersweet. :)
Ciero1326 chapter 1 . 4/8/2013
Wait a minute... I'm confused. Did Kasumi get an abortion or something?
Rose1948 chapter 1 . 2/19/2012
Sadly sweet. Or sweetly sad. Or both. I like. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful little story.

And yes, sometimes one feels that another is ALWAYS the better author, singer, dancer, gamer, artist, etc. All you can do is one's best. And smile while you're doing what you love to do.

Take care.
Lucyole chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
thats a good story i like it
HolyPuddingLord chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
You say, you decided to purposely write a failure, and this came of it? Well, congratulations, you have even failed at that. Personally, I really enjoyed this. For what it is, a oneshot that doesn't try to be dramatic or anything, it's just amazing. Perfect length, pacing is good, this story is certainly no failure.
Taka chapter 1 . 8/21/2009
Perhaps you'll remember me, perhaps not. I am normally known as Hawk, the first one, the original one, who loved your Kasumi 1/2 and believed it was a great story. Emailed you, like, 10 times when you were writing it. As I read this, I did noticed that it was completely taken from Kasumi 1/2 and didn't realize that the same person had written it, which is a relief to know.

Either way, don't feel down on your writing, it was always very well done, otherwise I would not have continued reading the fic. No matter how great a story might be, if the grammar and spelling suck, I won't continue with it, and you managed to pull off both.

With my fics, I have the same problem. You look back at them and go 'ick' compared to other authors. The sign of a good writer, as I've been told, is that they are never content with their writing. They always feel it can be improved in some way or another, so don't feel bad that you don't like your own work. It's common.

I hope you don't give up writing! You've got a gift! Just gotta figure out what you're gonna do with it. Good luck!
Morden Night chapter 1 . 3/22/2009
Well not bad considering it's length, I think it could have been much longer. The last few lines of dialogue between Ranma and Kasumi were almost completely unintelligible. I couldn't even understand the gist of what they were saying.

But all in all not bad.
TegwenielWestwind chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
Interesting read. Not much dramatic tension.
brown phantom chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
I read another story alot like this one called A New Direction Taken. The ending kind of confused me. Did Kasumi have a miscarriage?
sgb3 chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
It doesn't really work. It feels like we're joining a story in progress. Since there's no build-up to the major focus of the story, there's no emotional weight to the events or characters. The ensuing events read more like a summary than a story, and it's hard to care about what happens. One-shots can still be excellent stories, but you need SOME storytelling in there. Kasumi's pregnant, everyone reacts badly, they get married and live happily ever after. The End. It just doesn't work in such a short format.
dennisud chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
I can only say I liked this little one-shot and it told a saga in a small amount of space. I'd say this can be an inspiration for more stories. As for having alot of ideas with little writing coming from it, I have had the same with 2 stories in 2 years after 36 stories the previous years.

So I know what you mean!

moritynz chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
Good, nuf said
Wonderbee31 chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
Very good, and bittersweet fic there, and liked how things went with about the same way that it likely woud have in Takahashi's work, given that she never wrapped things up.