Reviews for Barbecue Flavored Kisses
libbyluvs chapter 5 . 9/13/2016
I'm not usually one for OC's but I like your Teddy character! Choji needs to be loved by someone!
R3M3MB3R-M3 chapter 5 . 2/4/2009
oh i loved it - you write so well Chouji is my favorite character and your OC teddy was such a Cutie! really nice work i i hope you continue to write stories just as good. my favorite people in naruto are lee, chouji and gai lmao weird but true. Chouji was so in character and thats hard to do and hard to find when reading others stories. once again great good!
R3M3MB3R-M3 chapter 2 . 1/15/2009
i love your work chouji is so in character it makes the story better!
superxXxSAMURAI chapter 2 . 1/3/2009
"Chouji can be such a drama queen."


The first Chappie was good.

O! Since you haven't written a ShikaChou yet, maybe you could make Teddy out to be the bad guy with alterior motives (getting into Chouji's pants)! Shikamaru would come over to Chouji's in the afternoon, but Teddy would come over first and make his move to get what he wants (Chouji would say he's not ready, but Teddy would not care and try anyway). Chouji would then know that Shikamaru and his dad were right in being suspicious. Hearing sounds of distress, Shikamaru would enter the Compound using his shadow skills and stop Teddy from hurting Chouji more than he already did. The rapist would then go to jail and Shikamaru would confess that he was, in fact, jealous in not so many words. Chouji wouldn't be able to accept Shikamaru right away though, having been almost raped. Hm... Maybe Teddy could drug him so he can't fight back, only yell and scream.

Only a suggestion. That way, you could have both pairings!


Wow, long review which mostly was a suggestion. Can't wait for the next chappie.