Reviews for Tragic Canine Lovers
The-dark-power-of-the-Darkness chapter 15 . 6/25
This is the best fanfic I read in my life
Calrissian97 chapter 1 . 6/30/2015
I'm so sad that the author isn't with us anymore, I feel that he had so much potential...
secret753 chapter 4 . 5/28/2015
Narutos got his own personal caoch
deathshadow1031 chapter 6 . 4/19/2015
Type your review for this chapter here...
SapphireKageKyuura chapter 7 . 3/29/2015
Okay that's weird. Since when does a dog take dominance over a person? That is messed lol but I enjoyed it.
DemonFox07 chapter 10 . 1/24/2015
Holy...shit
ArcticFox09 chapter 1 . 12/27/2014
I love this story your really good and how old r u out of curiosity...
fireblaze 7 chapter 15 . 10/22/2014
I loved everything about the story- the plot, the characters and their development, and the smut. This makes me their is someone for everyone. Also, congats on twohunderd reviews.
Guest chapter 15 . 6/23/2014
WOOO!
tris chapter 1 . 5/15/2014
You are a sick son of a bitch
gay people are disgusting freaks and you shouldnt promote trash like that
B3an3rz chapter 15 . 5/13/2014
I'm awestruck ) is all I can say
Guest chapter 5 . 3/15/2014
Omg i cried, i actually cried... I can't believe how good you are at writing its amazing, you completely paint a picture vividly...
Guest chapter 5 . 12/10/2013
That was perfect. I cried so much... D':
KxInu chapter 15 . 10/19/2013
OH MY GOD THAT ENDING WAS SO PERFECT I CAN NOT EVEN! This really was so freaking amazing and this was super bitter sweet because i hated that it ended but it was so perfect, loss for words really. just wow
ShowTime chapter 1 . 9/20/2013
The way you start the story seems like Konoha is telling the story itself.

It was an average day for our favorite blond hero for the most part. He woke up at seven sharp and ate a bowl of cereal before training his ass off for four and a half hours. Then he went to Ichiraku's and downed five bowls of various ramen flavors. When he was sitting and eating though, he felt hotter than what seemed necessary. It was a clear day in April, but it was only sixty degrees or so. Naruto just passed it off though as he exited the stand.

You're pretty much giving us the run down. Why not show us?

Naruto rubbed the sleep out of his eyes while his alarm clock sounded off, the annoying beeps resonating deep inside his head. He swung his legs out and started his usual morning routine of pissing, brushing his teeth, getting dressed and eating a bowl of cereal.

Light beads of sweat began to form on the blond's forehead as he put his bowl away. He wiped the moisture off with his arm. [this would be italicized] Man, it must be hot outside for me to start sweating this early in the day. It's only April... it shouldn't be this hot out![end italicized].

Naruto headed off towards the training ground, his blue eyes crinkled as he passed by a large thermometer reading only 62 degrees. The blond shrugged it off as his eyes focused in on his favorite place to train.

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"Whew, I'm exhausted!" shouted the blond to no one in particular as he toweled the excessive sweat off of himself. He sheepishly patted his stomach as it let out a loud gurgle, signaling his immense hunger after the long training session.

So, see how that is? It's more writing, sure, but you're getting the same message across except you're showing your readers instead of, "This happened, and then this happened..."

So I would say work from there and try to keep everyone a bit more in character unless it's an AU

Best of luck!
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