|Reviews for Deux or Don't|
| DeanandCastiel-my-boys33 chapter 2 . 8/9/2009
Hey great chapter! please update SOON! )
i's will be veeryy happy!
| Blkwidow77 chapter 1 . 2/12/2009
You had a very creative way of beginning the chapter. I was highly amused by the alarms and their placement. I could just envision a young teenage girl planting one in all those different places and later hating it when they did thier job.
Crazy and hectic. You protrayed this well. I could see a little room for more development of the morning. It could also use a few more images or placement, and less focus on her features. I know your trying to give the readers an idea of what she looks like but it would probably be better to do that more gradually. It's a better quality story when your readers don't see what you're doing but when it seems almost 'natural to say', if you know what I mean.
There were a few grammer errors, but other than that, it's good. I think it's a fun beginning to have.
| Platapuss chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
i find this interesting but i have not idea what it is doing.
| Shezka Foxe chapter 1 . 1/4/2009
Nani? Either Hiei and Keiko got together and had a kid, or your wonderful story somehow got stuck in the wrong area...