Reviews for What Do You Want, Ron?
johnh chapter 3 . 3/16/2009
yay happy ending!

well, i didn't spot any typos in this chapter or the last one (nice cliffhanger ending on Chap. two, by the way)

just one thing:

why does Harry say "Me neither" after Hermione says "good thing Ron isn't here"?

i think you meant "Me too", but i'm not sure...

other than that, though, perfect. a nice, entertaining fanfic
Johnh chapter 1 . 3/16/2009
hiya!

ok, i can already tell i like the style, and you've got a fun plot going, so i'll focus mostly on marking any spelling/grammar issues i see...

ok, lessee...

"And in that split second... more happy" i think happier would fit better than "more happy"

ok, back up the page: "She called me once more... her voice registered as the familiar, rough baritone to which i had become so familiar." it's usually better not to use the same word twice in one sentence, so i'd replace one of the "familiars"...

and that's about it. other than that, i like it a lot.

i'll read on
MisunderstoodDreamer7 chapter 3 . 3/15/2009
Hey! Very nice! You really did a good job with this. (Btw O.M. I bet you can't guess who this is! :D)

Anyway, you two did a really good job with this, and I hope to hear more soon! :)
Dreamer of All chapter 2 . 1/15/2009
ARGH! How can you just leave it at that? What did Hermione say? THESE ARE THINGS THAT NEED TO BE ANSWERED!

Amazing writing style, as always!

x

Addy
Dreamer of All chapter 1 . 1/4/2009
Aw...that's so sweet! I love how Ron's all scared but still wants to be "traditional" about everything. I think Hermione's one lucky witch!

Please write more?

x

Addy