|Reviews for The Demons Of Joshua Pole|
| Roonwit chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
I'm going to be honest with you: this story didn't make a lot of sense to me. Who is Josh and how does Susan know him? These are things you must explain before your reader can understand the events. There is no realism or any remotely believable storyline. Also, you have way too many errors. I would suggest that you proofread your stories and make corrections in spelling and grammar prior to posting them.
| SpangleyPony chapter 1 . 1/6/2009
So Josh was/is an alcoholic! I understand what you were trying to do, the retchedness came across perfectly and it is perfectly understandable for him to be like that after experiencing war and death. However I think it unrealistic in terms of timeline because he seemed so together/healed when he brought the Pevensie's letters to Susan. Aslan and Susan's help and comfort were spot on though.