|Reviews for After the end|
| weekyle16 chapter 1 . 1/9
Can I ask you something?
| LatiosofAltoMare chapter 30 . 11/16/2013
Ohh I can't wait!
Omg is Spartina and Bigwig going to have babies? Awwwww! Dat rabbit couple!
| Keeralie Starflight chapter 1 . 2/20/2013
Yikes! I will read this whole thing and I will like it, I hope, but why did you kill Hazel?
| ShadyPegasister chapter 12 . 1/21/2013
Just a quick note: In this chapter, I really loved the dream state Fiver went into. quite chilling. Great writing and creativity there. I also like the idea behind rabbits being told they were chosen to serve the warren, when it was to be fed to a badger.
| ShadyPegasister chapter 11 . 1/21/2013
Your plot lines and ideas are really great and I love this story. Fiver seems perfectly in character but Silverweed doesn't always seem to be. Silverweed seems a little too aggressive and bold towards Woundwort for his normally nervous character. I like that he stood up for Fiver, but think he would more likely do so, with a lot more quivering and backing down when threatened. He also seems to be lacking his insight a bit. He should have seen into the blind doe's heart and knew she was going to rescue him, same as he did when Campion and Blackberry did in the series. He also should have seen into Fivers mind after Fiver smelt the fox when they were in the drain. Even if Fiver couldn't speak, Silverweed would have sensed what was on his mind. Also, strange that there are three mystics in this warren and none of them could sense that they were in league with a badger.
Example " he (Fiver) couldn't help but see glowing red eyes stare at him threw the shadows, out of the corner of his eye. Silverweed ate happily, and unworried."
This is a nice scene with Fivers sight in full action and Silverweeds at zero! Loved the imagery of the red eyes in the shadows, but sad that Silverweed is seeing nothing. I know you say later that Silverweed doesn't get many visions, but in the series, he saw things quicker than Fiver and seemed more able to control his powers, where as Fiver doesn't control when he gets a vision.
I enjoyed the bits where Woundwort bullied the mystics trying to get them to work for him. I could definately see this happening.
I love the way you portrayed Hawkbit and his little stunt convincing Bigwig he was in charge made me smile. Excellent the way Bigwig reacted.
Hope you don't think I'm being too critical, I really do like the story. I know mine isn't perfect either.
| ShadyPegasister chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
It's a really nice start but just a few things I've noticed.
Lots of spelling mistakes. Try to do a spell check and a proof read before you post. I know this doesn't get all of the but it helps.
Spotina should be Spartina and silfah should have been Silflay.
I like the idea's in the story and the capturing of Fiver, also glad that Silverweed recovered as I just love Silverweed to bits!
| Bluebell-Rah chapter 29 . 2/12/2012
Please write a sequel to this story. This is brill.
| Embemxrabbit chapter 30 . 1/22/2012
just to let you no i love your watership down stories and i have one up, you can have a look if u want ;0
| XxSophieAnimeFanXx chapter 29 . 10/28/2011
I hope to have more campionxblackberry in my stories I LUV THEM XXX
| XxSophieAnimeFanXx chapter 30 . 10/28/2011
I luv your story and i hope you do a sequel!pretty soon im going to start writing about the tv series so u are not alone xxxx;)
| fivers11 chapter 29 . 4/25/2011
o no not fiver i cant beileve it, he gave his life for hazel that really touched my heart that was just so, so, so, o i cant even say it but do please have a sequel like maybe fiver comes back or something but yay sad very sad he was my fav. :(
but ya great job it just touuched my heart
| fivers11 chapter 28 . 11/11/2010
please add the rest PLEASE!
| Whitewolf513 chapter 28 . 6/23/2010
This story is really exciting!I can't wait to read the rest of update often!
| Whitewolf513 chapter 27 . 6/8/2010
A very interesting update very soon!I want to read the rest of it!
| Quidditch11 chapter 1 . 6/2/2010
the last time you update was the 2.02. please write more ! and fivers Real name is hrair roo and not hair roo