that'll be detention. actually no it won't I was defending myself from an attacker ill bring it to the board of govenors if I have to GOD I HATE THIS IN FFS screw the bint and tell her to stuff it

What a ride this fic has been. I binged in a day even though I was supposed to be working. I really liked the buildup all year long to the huge climactic battle at the Ministry at the end, and the dynamic and banter between the ADADA members is exactly the sort of thing I enjoy. The only thing I'm not a fan of is the whole pregnancy/baby thing, but that's just personal preference on my part and nothing to do with the writing. It certainly didn't detract from the enjoyment of the fic. I'll definitely be reading the sequel today and tomorrow!

They are in the middle of war. Handing out detentions to the leader of the war is beyond stupid. But then again the entire light side is beyond retarded. Why was hermione at the command post instead of Ron. That was retarded. Stupid decisions made only for the sake of stupid drama. ITS WAR YOU FUCKING IDIOTS! You don’t play nice, and you don’t tolerate idiots getting in the way helping the enemy with their stupid idealism. You remove them from your way.

I seem to have missed when exactly Harry killed someone in front of dumbledore...

Nice

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my name is Molly and this has given me so much joy

HA! Fuck you, Hermione, you annoying goddamn bitch!

also ignore that ignorant troll in the comment section going on about 'Hermione this, Hermione that boo hoo hoo'.

I can definitely say this story grew on me. I wasn't sure if I was going to like it when I started it, especially with how the first few chapters were written. Honestly the lack of information in those almost had me giving up because of how confusing things were at times. However you did give all the background info and fill in the blanks little by little and things picked up from there. The writing style also smoothed out as the story progressed and the characters became more fleshed out. I actually really liked this version of Harry and your character Ally. The very uniquely done creature inheritance they both have was very interesting and I liked how it changed things.

I also wasn't expecting the ADADA and how well they functioned. That was definitely well done, especially when they brought in bits of the Order and Ministry. It really worked with Ally's background and the training she gave to those that needed it.

I think the only thing I didn't like was how Hermione was treated, but it did make sense. She would have run directly to Dumbledore at the beginning with how she was written in this. I tend to like her being more loyal to Harry, but truly her canon personality has he near worshipful of Dumbledore and most authority figures. This version of her really pushed that part of her personality and almost expected her to figure things out and bring them to Dumbledore's attention. I'm rather glad she kept loosing that train of thought and decided to stay loyal to Harry. Hopefully everything will work out with that.

At any rate, this was an interesting story and now I'm even more curious to see where the rest of it goes. Part of me is really hoping Harry will just go ahead and take his NEWTS so he can focus on the war and spend time with his family. I'm really looking forward to seeing how things work out and if he decides to go back to Hogwarts as a student.

I can't say I'm crazy about the writing style, especially in the first couple chapters. However the story is amusing, interesting, and made me rather curious to see where it goes.

This is perhaps my third or fourth time reading this book because it is just that damn good. And everytime I get to this spot, I swear my reaction to it gets worse. Because, HOW in the name of purgatory, does Dumb-as-a-door find Harry having fun on a slightly chilly morning wrestling around with friends in the mud, WORRYING? 'Oh, Abby easily knocked a bigger dude off his feet. It is worrying because she shouldn't be able to do that.' He is an idiot. He should be HAPPY they are having fun and can defend themselves in some way. but noooooooo. he is not happy because it is not his way to do things. he wants people to only die when he basically tells them they can. and he wants all the teenagers in the middle of a war to be perfect little sacrifices because they can't defend themselves. I swear. every book I read where it showcases in light everything Dumbledore actually did (or didn't). I find myself hating him even more.

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How is Harry playing with the other kids outside something to worry about? I don't get it...

This is pretty cringe. The portions with just just Harry and Ginny aren’t horrible, and occasionally pretty good, even if they fellate Harry too much without any real on screen reasons. But this Mary Sue looking ass and her backstory really drop the quality. Absolutely no reason to continue reading beyond this point

I’m out. Harry is such a shitty friend. If I were hermione, I would tell this Harry to drop dead. This Harry doesn’t deserve any goodness at all. I hope hermione drops him, and this becomes the reason the fail completely. Because of how much of an asshole Harry is, Voldemort wins because Harry isn’t light. Ally dies, the baby dies, Harry suffers forever more alone like he deserves.