|Reviews for Breaking Fate's Rules|
| FanFicReader712012 chapter 1 . 3/3
You will write more of this, right?
| scorpioneldar chapter 1 . 1/25
mmm i like that image
i would like to see more of this... unique idea for the 5th grail war
but i doubt you will do it
still sexy and oddly in charecter
thank you for your efforts this was sexy and fun
| The Man chapter 1 . 4/8/2014
This was pretty good. I enjoyed it a lot.
| dispassioneight chapter 1 . 4/1/2014
It's a nice lemon, pretty zesty. Sakura is a little OC but not hugely. You could argue for it.
Anyways, er, nice smut? ; It had a good lead up, almost like porn with a plot, lol
| Ashen Author chapter 1 . 9/26/2013
Interesting. A somewhat tasteful lemon. It might actually be funny to see a.) how Medea wreaks havoc on Shinji and b.) her taming Rin. Alas.
| Element-OverLord chapter 1 . 6/17/2013
YOU MUST CONTINUE THIS! I Wonder If Rider And Saber Will Appear? And There Will Be Female Gilgamesh? Cause It Would Be A Good Plot Twist. I Also Like The Shirou X Caster X Harem Pairing.
| Takai153 chapter 1 . 10/18/2012
Nice! I would have liked to see more sex though. Shirou didn't do anything with Sakura other than make out and some oral sex would've been nice too. Still, it was very well written. I hope you write more in the future.
| Zaralann chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
Please! I beg you! Post more! Great story and AWESOME IDEA!
| Angry Santo chapter 1 . 9/14/2011
This is pretty fething good. As a one shot or as an opening for a series, it is golden.
I'm not the first to say this, but I feel obligated to add that this is too damn good to just leave as a one shot. keep up the good work
| The-Black-Prince-Thomas chapter 1 . 5/14/2011
Please tell me that this is just the start it looks like it would be a very diffent take on the story.
ten out of ten
| Delusional Fishies chapter 1 . 5/10/2011
D'awwww... That was so adorable!
| Orchamus chapter 1 . 9/21/2009
Hot damn, this is a fav now. I like her game plan, and the sex is nice too.
| Grinja chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
I'm a Caster fan, so I like this story. Its a great 1 shot with a good ending, but like another reviewer said, this story begs for a sequel or continuation.
| The Polyethylene Man chapter 1 . 2/25/2009
You should really consider continuing this.
| Rockomaniac chapter 1 . 2/17/2009
Clap Clap Clap!
That was a wonderful piece of work! It just seems to me you have a little comma problem. Though i haven't found anything actually grammatically wrong, i think the passage would be smoother if certain areas are rectified.
"She was full. In every way she was full."
There isn't anything wrong, but it just doesn't seem right to me. ( Maybe im over-sensitive to this kind of stuff.)
"She was full. In every way, she was full."
To me, this sounds way better. Better rhythm and stuff.
"She was full. She was full in every way."
This is more politically correct, but it doesn't sound that nice.
I found 2 or 3 of these kind of problems. Nothing actually wrong, but personally, i feel that the rhythm could be improved. Or maybe, its just because i'm a real prick and like to pick on the smallest thing.
Anyway, your work here is really encouraging. Fanfiction is really getting up to standards. ( Look at crap i post here...)
Hope to see an update,
P.S All my opinions are non-professional, and should not have any effect what-so-ever on anybody's writing. They are just ideas.