Reviews for The Unidentified
muyany chapter 12 . 5/22/2012
Is there any chance at all of this ever being continued? I would love to meet the other heroes.
SRAS9 chapter 12 . 3/3/2010
Great story! Will you continue this? I like it!
albaloo chapter 12 . 10/15/2009
Awesome story! My goodness, I can totally relate to Kenshin from earlier chapters, I suffer from chronic headaches as well, so reading this story was way more real for me :(

I like how your angle is so unique, most people make the main character be the superhero, but you took a very interesting approach here that made for a deeper plot and character development. Again, wonderful story and I hope you update soon!
JoChan-2005 chapter 12 . 8/18/2009
did I read correctly? ON HIATUS! U-R-KILLING-ME! '(
Brukaoru chapter 12 . 5/25/2009
Really enjoying the story so far! Very original. Keep it up! :D
Michika-chan chapter 12 . 5/24/2009
Waahh I swear i'm in love with this one!

hope you update soon!
evilteddybear chapter 12 . 5/19/2009
Awesome is usual. Don't worry too terribly much about the writer's block. Us fellow writers understand.

If you're feeling discouraged about your writing, or over-criticized just stop right here and don't bother to read the following criticism. It may be even more discouraging.

Now I don't want to come off as being too harsh, but a lot of this is about constructive criticism, so I really feel the need to honestly say:

"This guy was a total douche – it was written all over him."

-not professional. not at all. With your stellar vocabulary, I'm sure that there are other ways to say what you mean, without the use of profanity.

You might even take it as an opportunity to improve by substituting more specific details and concrete nouns for such vague and generalized descriptions. :D My point being that this could be a positive thing.

Anyway, regardless of writer's block-induced blunders, thank you for your time and effort! Don't take it too much to heart. I know that sometimes, when it comes to writing, you just have off days.
KuroitsukiNoMai chapter 12 . 5/18/2009
ooh, poor enishi... did i really just say that? haha . great chapter! i can't wait for your next update! .

*tsukiko*
Kohryu chapter 12 . 5/18/2009
more superheroes ne...interesting ne.

Poor Enishi ne. door slammed in the face...ouch, but only temporarily right ne? hahahahahahaha
kymikial chapter 12 . 5/18/2009
It was worth the wait! I can't wait till the next chapter.
skenshingumi chapter 12 . 5/17/2009
I really liked that touching bit at the end as Kaoru realizes her role to help keep Kenshin sane and human. Makes you feel a bit sorry for Enishi that he doesn't have someone like that right now. As for Kenshin, old friends and all but it would be very hard to forgive what Enishi put him through. Maybe he is just in such a good mood with Kaoru there that he feels it isn't worth being upset about it.
morning rush chapter 12 . 5/17/2009
Oh goody, an update! I liked Saito's powers, it really suited his persona (guess, you really had that inspiration from Heroes, ne?) Also, I think it's quite refreshing that you are NOT putting a love triangle for KK in this situation. Enishi may be an *ss sometimes, but at least he's got this sensitive and caring side... very human. Great job!
bbzachariah chapter 12 . 5/17/2009
Hey! This is probably one of my most favorite chapters. I love the originality and practicality of it. I always hated the "secret identity" concept interfering with love. I like Natsumi's realness (even though she knows the right answer, the confusion is SO human and very personal to a lot of people who are put into situations where their boyfriend is unable to give them 100% attention) but I love Kaoru's comment at the end about being unidentified in the sense that she's HIS saving grace. The talk between Kaoru and Natsumi was a brilliant idea and VERY practical. You don't see that usually in the movies or the cartoons so I appreciate your ability to make things so much more relateable (relateable as superhero's go anyway). My favorite line was Kaoru's masochistic comment. It was just the perfect mix of angst and sarcasm. I have nothing that I can critique on. You did an awesome job (especially with the originality). Can't wait to see your next chapter!
Adelaide MacGregor chapter 12 . 5/17/2009
Good job, good luck.
JadeEye chapter 12 . 5/17/2009
Wow...I can't say I like Enishi but I felt bad for the poor guy and for Natsumi. She seems to be really confused. I hope they can have a happy ending. And Kaoru is such a cutie. It made me very happy. Thank you and I hope you can update soon!
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