Reviews for My Happy Ending
Saki Toyo chapter 1 . 7/4/2010
Oh, this is such a cute fic! -

I loved it!

You obviously enjoy using dialogue, and you're very good at it, too! But you might want to take some time to write in more detail - describe the characters' surroundings and their feelings. It'll make it much better!

I also noticed that you repeatedly used "smirk". You could try using different words instead of that, since repeating one word over and over may be a little strange. I like to use a thesaurus to do this.

I hope I didn't sound arrogant. .

All in all, great job!
qewla chapter 1 . 6/15/2009
wow, that is simple and sweet.

Like it!

Potential of being a good story if you continue you know.

btw, keep up the good work!
Kunie chapter 1 . 1/12/2009
Wouldn't you consider in making it a lemon?
jazzmin92 chapter 1 . 1/11/2009
nice one ! cant wait for more.