|Reviews for Whispering Dawn|
| Aina Song chapter 1 . 7/9
I'm sorry, I just couldn't keep reading once I'd encountered a grammatical pet peeve of mine. You can't squeeze entire conversations into single paragraphs like that; it confuses and frustrates the reader - sometimes enough that they, like myself, will have trouble maintaining an interest in what may happen next. Any time - EVERY time - someone new is speaking, or the point of view changes between characters, you must start a new paragraph. It makes the read much smoother, easier on the eyes and mind, and helps the reader to maintain interest.
I apologize if my words sound cruel or rude. They really aren't meant to be. I only want to offer my constructive criticism, in the hope that it will help you in the future.
| MisterCrown chapter 2 . 6/11
Thy actually means 'you' not 'by' as seen within the context of the title.
| SnowTigerQueen chapter 15 . 10/29/2014
Please continue this story and if your Beta is still out for the count, I'd love to fill their shoes. I was also hoping you could give me a little advice on my own harry potter twilight crossover.
| dragneell49 chapter 15 . 10/24/2014
please update soon
| Shadow315 chapter 8 . 4/10/2014
I'd be ... unnerved to find Edward coming into my room, in the middle of the night, to watch me sleep without my permission or even knowledge! I'd be furious and feel ... suffocated! I wouldn't like it, I hope Harry, who seems to like his privacy, has a real-like reaction!
| Shadow315 chapter 4 . 4/10/2014
... Please, I beg you ... there are too many stories where Harry just lets the Cullens walk all over him (not necessarily in a bad way). Like buying him clothes without so much as asking him what he wants, cooking his food without thinking that MAYBE he likes to do it himself, decorating HIS home without thought of what he wants! ... sorry but that really pisses me off 'cause I'd be furious and resentful and want nothing to do with them.
off to read more!
P.S. a little advise? ... when you have people talking, space it out. Have what someone says on one line (paragraph) and what the other says after in another. It makes it easier to read.
| aidabye chapter 15 . 4/3/2014
Love the story really hope you continue it.
| devils-momma chapter 15 . 3/5/2014
Love the story and hope you continue to write it. Keep up the good work and keep smiling.
| Mashkai30 chapter 15 . 2/28/2014
Lovely story! I like it thus far and am looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing!
| Charlie0925 chapter 15 . 2/1/2014
I am so thrilled that I found this fic! Amazing writing hun, I truly cannot wait to read more! ;o)
| maya31 chapter 15 . 1/28/2014
| Quebie331 chapter 13 . 1/11/2014
THAT WAS GOOD! It wasn't PORNIE at all. Really Hot and Sexy. I felt it. Please finish this story. Thx.
| auerlia chapter 15 . 12/21/2013
Love it please update soon
| Artistic Dragon chapter 15 . 12/19/2013
Just letting you know that I am still reading your fic and can't wait for an update.
| kat1316 chapter 9 . 12/11/2013