Reviews for Back in Esme's arms
Torgetta chapter 1 . 12/29/2012
Short, but cute.
jetbrat chapter 1 . 7/31/2011
these are great please keep going. amazing
madnessdownunder2 chapter 2 . 5/5/2011
Oh very good! But you need to use your spellchecker!
madnessdownunder2 chapter 1 . 5/5/2011
Uh oh! The fear is understandable, nice one!
wandamarie chapter 2 . 7/2/2010
wow it was a good one thanks
TwilightGuru09 chapter 2 . 6/20/2010
Poor Baby. He had to get it from both Dad and Mom. He won't be sitting down for a couple of days.

But you can tell they both love him immensely.
TwilightGuru09 chapter 1 . 6/20/2010
I love the sweet connection you make between Esme and Edward. He truly sees her as mom, which is so good. She loves him so much and i like hearing him call her mom.
ficwriterjet chapter 2 . 11/15/2009
I thought this was a very nice story. I liked that as soon as Edward heard that Esme was even thinking about spanking him, he got out of his room, and begged her not to. I liked her walking him to his room, and I liked that she spanked him over the back of a chair. Thanks.
emmettlover224 chapter 2 . 6/9/2009
I say u do Jasper next, just because im addicted to him too. Also, i think he would deserve it...
capri chapter 2 . 5/7/2009
hey du kannst echt du Englisch! Ich hab nie gedacht dass du eigentlich aus Deutschland kommt! Bitte mehr schreiben!
supergirl3684 chapter 2 . 5/3/2009
that was great! poor edward...bet he never saw that one coming!
wandamarie chapter 1 . 4/11/2009
it was a good chapter thank you
Petuniac3 chapter 2 . 3/23/2009
so good
Dreams Of Naughtiness chapter 1 . 3/8/2009
Aw that was very sweet an motherly from esme
Helpful Passer-byer chapter 2 . 2/27/2009
YOU WROTE: I felt sad for Edward, that he thought he had to go to Italy to die; I was happy to have him back at home, but angry that he broke his promise and tried to end his life; disappointed with him and myself, yet relieved to get a chance to correct my mistakes, of which there were obviously so many.

Even though you used semicolons, this is gramatically considered a run-on. It should be written:

I felt sad for Edward, that he thought he had to go to Italy to die. I was happy to have him back at home; but angry that he broke his promise and tried to end his life, and disappointed with him and myself. Yet, I was relieved to get a chance to correct my mistakes, of which there were obviously so many.

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YOU WROTE: Alice had suggested I go shopping for a few houres and I didn’t question her.

The word is spelt "hours" not "houres".

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YOU WROTE: His shoulders slumped noticeable now, while he turned around, not looking at me, to hurry upstairs.

"Noticeable" would be used in the sentence- "The electric blue highlights in his hair were noticeable from even this distance." The word "noticeably" would fit this sentence correctly. It should also be written: "His shoulders noticeably slumped now"

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YOU WROTE: “Please don’t” Edward interrupted, standing in the door suddenly, pleading with big, round eyes, afraid.

You're missing your punctuation after his dialogue. A period or exclimation mark would suffice.

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YOU WROTE: “I called Chief Swan, but Jacon Black answered the phone, telling me that the Chief was at the funeral. That’s when I broke down. I thought my Bella was dead.” His voice was getting quiet to the end, remembering the hard time he had had on his way to Italy.

Jacob Black, not Jacon. :D

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YOU WROTE: I let him see Alice calling us frantically after he had made his decision, telling us Bella was fine, that they were going to Europe; not telling anything more than to keep Jasper at home, and that she loved us; Carlisle holding me in his arms trying to reassure everyone, that Alice would know what to do and that she would bring Edward and Bella home safely.

Another run-on. Try: I let him see Alice calling us frantically after he had made his decision, telling us Bella was fine and that they were going to Europe; then not telling anything more than to keep Jasper at home. She told us that she loved us, too. I showed him Carlisle holding me in his arms and trying to reassure everyone that Alice would know what to do, and that she would bring Edward and Bella home safely.

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YOU WROTE: Our concern, pacing like humans around the phones, waiting for a sign of life, and finally, the relief, when Alice called, saying they were on their way home; all this went through my mind, almost too fast to follow.

This is just slightly awkward to read. perhaps: Our concern as we paced like humans around the phones, waiting for a sign of life. And, finally the relief when Alice called and said they were on their way home. All this went through my mind, almost too fast to follow.

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I am not sure if you noticed, but I didn't re-say things I said in past reviews. Some of the things, like the word "whispert" are appearing in these fics too, though. Keep that in mind.
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