Reviews for Woman King
geekgirlhope chapter 1 . 1/14/2009
Umm...wow I really really loved this. It was steamy and hot and yet sweet and tender.

Very good job!
poeticrebel chapter 1 . 1/14/2009
Wicked awesome.
MRS.cullen.BOOTH.malfoy.BOLTON chapter 1 . 1/14/2009
Immediately Bella tensed and pulled back. Her arms tightened around her waist and even the aroma that I had felt sweeping warmly across my white cold skin left in a swift rush. “Geez Edward, you really know how to kill a mood.”

lol :D

but this story is very well written. congrats!
HeatherRiddle chapter 1 . 1/14/2009
Well it was beautiful. I'll give you that. Really, I thoroughly enjoyed it. But something was lacking. The only thing is that I don't really know what it was. The writing was great, and I tend towards that style myself-mostly thought dictation and such-but it almost felt like it was forced. Like you were trying so hard not to write a scene where it was all exposition. It came out well, but not inspired. You should try one where you just write the action, and not the thoughts. See where that takes you. You obviously have great potential.

In all, considering this is fanfiction, I'd give it an 11 out of 11.

Nice work

HRiddle
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