|Reviews for Pinnacle|
| sweetlilsunshine chapter 6 . 1/1/2011
| Chans chapter 6 . 11/5/2010
It's great to see you've picked this story up again :)
And with such a great chapter too!
I'm eagerly awaiting your next update.
| DandyGirl chapter 6 . 11/3/2010
OMG I thought this story was lost to WIPery for all time. So happy to see it continued! Off to read now ...
| Chans chapter 5 . 11/2/2010
Wow. Just, wow.
This was an amazing read and I’m really hoping you’ll ever pick this story up again (since it looks like you’ve dropped it?)
I absolutely adore you’re take on Sparrow and you’ve managed to keep Reaver perfectly in character. Very impressive :)
One of the better stories I’ve read in a long time.
| JoulesPalladiumStark chapter 5 . 7/1/2010
Interesting. Unlike any story I've ever read. And I can't tell where this story will go. I am awaiting an update eagerly.
| Crazed-Authoress chapter 5 . 6/1/2010
Wow...this is...interesting, and I must say I love it so far. Your Sparrow being so bitter and resentful is much more realistic than most I've seen. I mean, c'mon, who wouldn't be pissed if a crazy old gypsy took something that may as well have been yours?
Well, you have kept Reaver very in-character, which is another great thing! I can't wait for the next chapter!
| pepperjinks chapter 5 . 11/30/2009
UPDATE THIS AH
| WolfsTrinity-TSO chapter 5 . 8/18/2009
This is good. It doesn't have the usual tone of a fable story, though there's still that tone of bitter, mocking laughter that inhabits certain parts of the games, which I quite like.
| Enefet chapter 5 . 8/18/2009
It's so rare to come across such a well written story. I have the feeling you don't really intend to continue though. Which is partly disappointing but that's the way the cookie crumbles.
Regardless, it was a pleasure to read and I'll keep a tab on it should you feel the urge to write more.
| DandyGirl chapter 5 . 8/17/2009
OMFG YOU UPDATED IT! I haven't actually read the new chapter yet but congratulations and thank you and good on you for writing some more. Yes. I am sure it will be awesome.
| Whoaless chapter 4 . 8/13/2009
Why did you stop! I was really enjoying this until I realized there was no next button next to the chapter, and actaully dissapointed that you hadnt updated it since 2-2-09.
I absolutly love the way you write, dont change a thing. though I wouldnt mind more dialogue.(which you have already promised.)
| Loving-Chakra chapter 4 . 8/9/2009
twas all good
| Barbosa chapter 4 . 6/23/2009
What more can I say about this? It's immaculate.
| MaestroHex chapter 4 . 6/10/2009
U should continue the story it seems awesome so far.
I/We will be w8
| Lord Genesis Shadow chapter 4 . 6/10/2009
I must say that this is interesting. I've not thought of the fourth hero like this, mostly because I prefer to be the true definition of a good hero, but I must say that you're working this out quite well. That said, the chapters are short for my tastes. Something seems to say to me that you could combine the first two into one chapter to make it longer. But, I have self imposed word and page quotas to meet before I'll consider a chapter complete, not counting the Disclaimer and thoughts at the beginning. Though, I add the Disclaimer and such after completing the chapter officially. So I prefer to read a chapter and stay on one page for a good twenty or so minutes, scrolling down and really taking it in. That said, I read at a very high level, ever since I was still getting the hang of walking. So twenty minutes for me means about three or four thousand words if I'm at a leisurely pace. But that's just me talking, take this advice as you will, and do as you will. All I can do is make my suggestions. It is completely up to you what you do with your work.
I will note a few mistakes here and there with using the wrong variation of a word. I won't say which though, I'll leave that to you. I like where it's going, and I find myself curious to the end of the chapter I review from. Reversing everything, perhaps you could go back a bit and tell the story from the beginning and how Sparrow arrived at the point we see her at.
Such anger I feel from her, I wonder what could have happened. Besides losing her sister, getting shot and blown out of a window and landing on two roofs before hitting frozen pavement, losing her dog, getting enslaved at the tower, dying, losing her dog, and so on. Stuff that angers her so much, that makes her so, so, troubled I feel I should say, that would leave her with some deep emotional scars. Perhaps telling in the form of a flashback. I'm just so curious as to why she's so angry and troubled.
Oh, and I do a Tagline on most reviews. I haven't done one in a while, so here you go. The first Tagline of June.
Keeping a watchful eye on this work, I rest upon my throne of Ice, in the kingdom of,
Lord Genesis Shadow