Reviews for Pathetic
Guest chapter 1 . 3/21/2014
Hahahahaha sounds just like Michel, being a total douche but always gets forgiven because he's so hot
Bella chapter 1 . 4/18/2009
u should totally do more i liked the story alot!
shadowplayer1 chapter 1 . 1/20/2009
Hi. This isn't bad. There are some nice touches here: dancing to Ella, when Kerry thinks about Michel "she thinks in sentence fragments;" liked the bit about Ian liking Michel.

You have something here. Just need to flesh it out a bit.

Thanks for sharing.
MythStar Black Dragon chapter 1 . 1/20/2009
Can see how she is thinking what she is thinking loved it

maia
Anidori-Kiladra chapter 1 . 1/18/2009
Nice. I like the ending.

~Ani
AiDeeKay chapter 1 . 1/18/2009
Okay. It IS very random and rambley, like you said.

Still though, it makes you feel like you are in her mind without having you doing it in first person, so kudos.

AND I like how you made this such a twist. He really is fucked up to her. You show that side Kerry in the book said he might or might not have.

Overall, I like this story (in case you haven't noticed) and hope you continue it.
xVine Archerex chapter 1 . 1/18/2009
Huh...

It's strange, I'll admit...but I LIKE it. Especially the last line.

~Vine